STAAR Revise and Edit Practice

REVISE THE FOLLOWING SENTENCE:

It was little, there was just enough room for me, my two cousins, my dad, and my uncle.

Combine sentences 27 and 28 to improve the flow of his paper. (USE AN AAAWWUBBIS in the middle)

Which of the following sentences is correctly punctuated?

• I went to the store and bought apples, oranges, and, bananas.

• I went to the store and bought apples oranges, and bananas.

• I went to the store and bought apples, oranges, and bananas.

• I went to the store and bought apples, oranges, and, bananas.

Answer explanation

The correct sentence should have commas before 'and' when listing items. Choice A is correctly punctuated with commas before 'and' for each item listed.

Identify the grammatical error in the sentence: Their going to the movies tonight.

• Incorrect use of 'They' instead of 'Their'

• Incorrect use of 'They're' instead of 'Their'

• Incorrect use of 'There' instead of 'Their'

• Incorrect use of 'Their' instead of 'They're'

Answer explanation

The grammatical error in the sentence is the incorrect use of 'Their' instead of 'They're' which is the contraction for 'They are'.

What is the MOST effective revision to make in sentence 23?

• In a panic I ransacked our recycle bin, pulling out brown cardboard boxes, paper towel tubes, and paper scraps that I hastily glued together.

• In a panic I ransacked our recycle bin, pulling out brown cardboard boxes, paper towel tubes, and there were paper scraps that I hastily and quickly glued together.

• In a panic I ransacked our recycle bin, hastily and quickly gluing together what I pulled out, which was brown cardboard boxes, paper towel tubes, and paper scraps.

• In a panic I ransacked our recycle bin, pulling out and removing brown cardboard boxes, paper towel tubes, and paper scraps for hastily gluing together.

Revise the following sentence for clarity and structure.

• The party was fun with loud music, and everyone danced.

• The loud music made the party fun, and everyone danced.

• Everyone danced at the fun party with loud music.

• The party was boring. No one danced. The music was loud.

Answer explanation

The correct choice is 'The party was fun with loud music, and everyone danced.' as it combines the three separate sentences into one coherent sentence for clarity and structure.

What is the best way to combine the following sentences: For example, the minimum wage in Texas is $7.25 per hour. At this rate, a $100 pair of jeans would take almost 14 hours of work to earn.

• For example, at the minimum wage of $7.25 per hour, a $100 pair of jeans would take almost 14 hours of work to earn.

• For example, the minimum wage is $7.25 per hour, a $100 pair of jeans would take almost 14 hours of work to earn.

• The minimum wage is $7.25 per hour, and earning $100 pair of jeans would take almost 14 hours of work.

• A $100 pair of jeans would take almost 14 hours to earn, and the minimum wage is $7.25 per hour.

Answer explanation

The correct choice combines the two sentences effectively by stating, 'For example, at the minimum wage of $7.25 per hour, a $100 pair of jeans would take almost 14 hours of work to earn.'

What is the most effective revision to make in the following sentence:

In a dive being led by senior scientist Bruce Robison, he came across the 9-centimeter-long fish in Monterey Bay.

• In a dive, led by senior scientist Bruce Robison, the 9-centimeter-long fish was found in Monterey Bay.

• Senior scientist Bruce Robison came across 9-centimeter-long fish while leading a dive in Monterey Bay.

• In a dive, which was being led by senior scientist Bruce Robison, the 9-centimeter-long fish in Monterey Bay.

• Senior scientist Bruce Robison, leading a dive in Monterey Bay, he came across the 9-centimiter-long fish.

Answer explanation

The correct choice is 'Senior scientist Bruce Robison came across 9-centimeter-long fish while leading a dive in Monterey Bay.' as it correctly attributes the action to the scientist and provides a clear and concise sentence structure.

What change is needed in the following sentence: I imagined all the other competitors raving about Gideget's skill and speed on the course, and my amazing handling abilitys.

• Change imagined to imagining

• Change course to coarse

• Change Gidget's to Gidgets

• Change abilitys to abilities

Answer explanation

The correct change is to replace 'abilitys' with 'abilities' to correct the spelling of the word in the sentence.

What change needs to be made in the following sentence: I tried resorting to our training steps, but the judge instructed me to continue passed the obstacle.

• Change resorting to resortting

• Change passed to past

• Change the comma to a semicolon

• Change instructed to instructs

Answer explanation

The correct change needed in the sentence is to replace 'passed' with 'past' to make it grammatically correct.