Revising Review

Simon has included a redundant sentence. Which sentence should be deleted from this paragraph?

• Sentence 3

• Sentence 4

• Sentence 5

• Sentence 6

The word sudden is not the most effective and descriptive word in sentence 6. Select the word that should replace sudden. "Every now and then, it's the ____________ accidents that impart a painting with something truly unique."

• unknown

• startling

• unforeseen

• anticipated

What is the BEST way to revise sentence 9?

• It became apparent mistakes are to me sometimes a disguised gift.

• It became apparent to me that sometimes gifts are disguised mistakes.

• It became apparent to me that sometimes mistakes are a disguised gift.

• No change is needed.

The meaning of sentence 5 is unclear. Which word should replace they in the sentence?

• Lovers of games

• Creative people

• Game players

• Board game designers

Layla has included a redundant sentence. Which sentence should be deleted from this paragraph?

• Sentence 1

• Sentence 2

• Sentence 3

• Sentence 4

What is the BEST way to revise sentence 3 to avoid repeating ideas?

• However, it is worth it when you decide the fulfillment has happened.

• However, the fulfillment that comes with improving your skills makes it worth it.

• However, with fulfillment, you often improve your skills, and it is worth it.

Imogen wants to use a more effective and descriptive word than spread in sentence 4. Which word should replace spread in this sentence?

• extended

• stretched

• drawn-out

• expanded

Mélisande would like to add a topic sentence to her paragraph. Which of the following sentences should be added before sentence 1 to accomplish this goal?

• Did you know fresh air is important for people to look for?

• There are some health benefits to fresh air.

• Fresh air is one of the most important things we need for good health.

What change should be made in sentence 2?

• Delete the comma after arrived

• Change took to take

• Change Lady Bird lake to Lady Bird Lake

• Change their to they’re

The author forgot to include this sentence in the paragraph. The flurry of activity on the water quickly captured Odette's attention, from kayaking to stand-up paddleboard yoga. Where is the BEST place to insert this sentence?

• After sentence 2

• After sentence 3

• After sentence 4

• After sentence 5