STAAR Revising Editing

What change should Gena make in sentence 17?

• Insert a comma after September

• Change whom to who

• Change proficient to proficiant

• Change came to comes

What change, if any, needs to be made in sentence 25?

• Insert a comma after performance

• Change the comma after 1926 to a semicolon

• Change mechanical to machanical

• No change should be made.

How does sentence 28 need to be changed?

• F Change Similar to Similarly

• G Change female to females

• H Change started to would start

• J Insert a comma after Club

What should you be checking when revising? Click on all that apply *Hint: think of the acronym for revising*

• Add words or sentences

• Capitalize names, places, months, titles, "I"

• Punctuation

• Remove unneeded words or sentences

• Move sentences or words around

What is the correct way to write sentences 23 and 24?

• Many of the species that once made their home on Madagascar are now extinct, scientists, however, are still making discoveries.

• Although many of the species that once made their home on Madagascar are now extinct and scientists are still making discoveries.

• Many of the species that once made their home on Madagascar are now extinct, but there are scientists. Who are still making discoveries.

• Although many of the species that once made their home on Madagascar are now extinct, scientists are still making discoveries.

What is the best change we can make to this sentence:
After a few more questions and a breif pause, the quiz continued.

• Change few to fewer

• Change breif to brief

• Change the , to a ;

• No change needs to be made

Choose the correct sentence

• The 11-year old also began writing a diary it detailed what was happening in her region of Pakistan.

• The 11-year old also began writing a diary. With details what was happening in her region of Pakistan.

• The 11-year old also began writing a diary that detailed what was happening in her region of Pakistan.

• The sentence are written correctly in the paper.

Which of the following sentences is correctly punctuated?

• In the dead of the night. The van pulled up.

• Chuck would not, give Jamie the seat.

• Over coffee and toast, Kelly told me about her new job.

• Lemonade. My favorite drink.

What is the most effective revision to make in sentence 14?

• And at the age of 17, she was playing for the University of North Carolina, she helped her team win four NCAA championships and broke many school records along the way.

• And at the age of 17, she was playing for the University of North Carolina and won four NCAA championships and breaking many school records along the way, which helped her team.

• And at the age of 17, she was playing for the University of North Carolina, which helped her team win four NCAA championships and breaking many school records along the way.

• And at the age of 17, she was playing for the University of North Carolina, where she helped her team win four NCAA championships and broke many school records along the way.

The following sentence pair can be revised into one better sentence. Choose the sentence with the best revision.

The bicycle tire is flat. The bicycle tire is on the bike.

• The bicycle tire is on the bike and the bicycle tire is flat.

• The flat bicycle tire is on the bike.

• On the bike, the bicycle tire there is flat.

• The bicycle tire on the bike is flat.