STAAR Revising Editing

What is the correct way to write sentences 15 and 16?

• He was baffled by the idea of discarding perfectly good soap, Kayongo asked the hotel for an explanation.

• While baffled by the idea of discarding perfectly good soap. Kayongo asked the hotel for an explanation.

• Baffled by the idea of discarding perfectly good soap, Kayongo asked the hotel for an explanation.

• The sentences are written correctly in the paper

What is the correct way to write sentence 21?

(21) Although Uganda is recovering from years of war, the nation is still plagued by poverty, many workers earn no more than a dollar a day.

• Although Uganda is recovering from years of war, the nation is still plagued by poverty. With many workers earning no more than a dollar a day.

• Although Uganda is recovering from years of war. The nation is still plagued by poverty, and many workers earn no more than a dollar a day

• Although Uganda is recovering from years of war, the nation is still plagued by poverty. Many workers earn no more than a dollar a day.

• The sentence is written correctly in the paper.

How should sentence 29 be changed?

(29) This inovative program is bringing an important disease-fighting tool to people around the world.

• Change inovative to innovative

• Change is bringing to was bringing

• Insert a comma after tool

• Sentence 29 should not be changed.

What transition would be the most appropriate to use at the beginning of sentence 6?

• A As a matter of concern

• B For further evidence

• C To wipe away any doubt

• D For this reason among others

Candice may have a redundant sentence in the fourth paragraph (sentences 22–26). Which sentence, if any, should be deleted?

• F Sentence 24

• G Sentence 25

• H Sentence 26

• J No sentence should be deleted.

Melody’s opening sentence is unclear. What change should she make in sentence 1 to clarify her introductory paragraph?

• F Change They to Teachers and leaders at our school

• G Change continually to always

• H Change telling us to instructing us

• J Change community to surrounding neighborhood

What is the most effective way to combine sentences 6 and 7?

• My own sister is having a hard time in math attending one of the elementary schools that feeds into our high school.

• My own sister attends one of the elementary schools that feeds into our high school although she is having a hard time in math.

• My own sister, who attends one of the elementary schools that feeds into our high school, is having a hard time in math.

• My own sister attends one of the elementary schools that feeds into our high school, she is having a hard time in math.

Melody needs a better transition into the third paragraph (sentences 12–17) of her essay. Which of the following could she add before sentence 12 to improve this transition?

• F In researching mentoring programs, I learned of several promising results.

• G As I think about a mentoring program, I have many ideas on how it should work.

• H If struggling youngsters get the help they need, it could benefit teachers, too.

• J Because I believe in the mentoring concept, I’d like to see it at our school.

What change, if any, needs to be made in sentence 4?

• F Change benefitial to beneficial

• G Insert a comma after people

• H Change healthier to healthiest

• J No change is needed in sentence 4.

What change, if any, needs to be made in sentence 26?

• F Change minimal to minamal

• G Change are to were

• H Delete the comma after appropriate

• J No change is necessary.