Revising and Editing Questions

He later explained that he just wasn’t confident he would be able to land the kayak safe.

What change, if any, needs to be made in sentence 27?

• Change explained to explains

• Change confident to confidant

• Change safe to safely

• No change needs to be made in this sentence.

What is the best change we can make to this sentence: 

After a few more questions and a breif pause, the quiz continued.

• Change few to fewer

• Change breif to brief

• Change the , to a ;

• No change needs to be made

What change, if any, needs to be made in sentence 32?

• Insert quotation marks before the first and

• Change I think to we think

• Change testament to testiment

• No change needs to be made in sentence 32.

What is the most effective revision to make in sentence 14?

• And at the age of 17, she was playing for the University of North Carolina, she helped her team win four NCAA championships and broke many school records along the way.

• And at the age of 17, she was playing for the University of North Carolina and won four NCAA championships and breaking many school records along the way, which helped her team.

• And at the age of 17, she was playing for the University of North Carolina, which helped her team win four NCAA championships and breaking many school records along the way.

• And at the age of 17, she was playing for the University of North Carolina, where she helped her team win four NCAA championships and broke many school records along the way.

Which sentence is written correctly?

• In the morning. the mat is rolled up and placed in a small closet.

• In the morning, the mat is rolled up and placed in a small closet.

• As the mat is rolled up and placed in a small closet, it is in the morning.

• In the morning, the mat is rolled up, and placed in a small closet.

Dan and his wife Lisa have invented a new way of celebrating thanksgiving.

• Change Dan to dan

• Change invented to inventing

• Change celebrating to celabrating

• Change thanksgiving to Thanksgiving.

Revise this: The forest was very beautiful.

• The forest was enchanting.

• The forest made me very happy.

• Redwoods stretched from the dense, green foliage into the blue sky.

• The forest was big and majestic. There were trees everywhere.

Which of these sentences should Ms. Keller add at the beginning of the paragraph (sentences 7-15) to serve as the most effective position statement for her essay?

• I think I would like the four-day school week because I would enjoy the extra time to rest on the weekend.

• The four-day school week is a great idea for all students and parents, and even the school district would likely benefit.

• We spend way too much time during the week in school, and it would be nice to have a three-day weekend for a part-time job or to just relax.

• The four-day school week provides benefits that would help the students, teachers, and schools in our district.

Ms. Keller wants to add a quotation that will help support the idea presented in sentence 16. Analyze the quotations below. Which of these would be the most effective to insert after sentence 16?

• One state official noted, "It's the same as giving the key to your house to a burglar."

• The founder of Facebook once said, "When you give everyone a voice and give people power, the system usually ends up in a really good place."

• "Our head of social media is the customer," said a spokesperson for one well-known company.

• "We're all social creatures," one magazine states.

Which answer shows the correct way to write the sentence?

• Otherwise, the pancakes would stick to the the surface. And have a big mess to clean up.

• Otherwise, the pancakes would stick to the surface then we would have a big mess to clean up.

• Otherwise, the pancakes would stick to the surface, and we would have a big mess to clean up.

• Otherwise, the pancakes would stick to the surface, we would have a big mess to clean up then.