Revising: Texas's Oldest Hangout

Miguel wants to write a thesis statement that accurately conveys the main idea of his paper. Which of the following sentences should he add after sentence 3?

• It was even readied for use as a nuclear fallout shelter for when President Johnson visited Texas.

• Who wouldn't want to see such an important natural wonder?

• The cavern is a natural wonder that has been used by animals and people for millions of years.

• Cave enthusiasts from all over love to visit Longhorn Cavern and enjoy its beauty.

Miguel would like to use a more appropriate transition in sentence 5. Which of the following best replaces For Example?

• Additionally

• However

• First

• Therefore

What is the most effective way to revise sentence 7?

• Seepage, which is what this water is called, wears down the limestone and eventually by the water doing this it forms the caves.

• This water, called seepage, wears down the limestone and eventually forms the caves.

• This water, called seepage, wears down the limestone, and eventually the water it forms the caves.

• Seepage is what the water is called that wears down the limestone and eventually forms the caves.

Miguel wants to be more specific in sentence 10. Which of these could best replace the word Things?

• Landmarks

• Items

• Weapons

• Fossils

What is the most effective way to combine sentences 12 and 13?

• The largest room in the cavern is called the Indian Council Room; however, about 400 years ago Comanche tribal leaders used it as a meeting place.

• The largest room in the cavern is called the Indian Council Room, and because about 400 years ago Comanche tribal leaders used it as a meeting place.

• The largest room in the cavern is called the Indian Council Room because about 400 years ago Comanche tribal leaders used it as a meeting place.

• The largest room in the cavern is called the Indian Council Room, about 400 years agon Comanche tribal leaders used it as a meeting place.

Miguel's transition from the third paragraph (sentences 10-15) to the fourth paragraph (sentences 16-21) is weak. Which of the following could best replace sentence 16 and provide a more effective transition between these two paragraphs?

• The cave was also used for a variety of illegal purposes.

• The cave was the perfect place to hide from the Union Army.

• Now the public may visit the cave and view its beauty.

• Other people used the cave, too.