Revising Practice

1. What revision should be made in sentence 2?

• a) Change "an elderly woman" to "a young woman."

• b) Remove "who had been baking for over fifty years."

• c) Add "and her bakery was the best in town."

• d) Change "was owned by" to "was run by."

The sentence "The scent of cinnamon and sugar wafted through the air," needs to be added. Where should this sentence be added?

• a) After sentence 5.

• b) After sentence 6.

• c) After sentence 7.

• d) After sentence 8.

1. Which sentence in the third paragraph should be removed because it repeats information?
   

• a) "Mrs. Baker tried to come up with new recipes."
  

• b) "Her pastries were still delicious."

• c) "This made Mrs. Baker sad."
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• d) "The new baker offered a variety of

1. Which sentence best follows and supports sentence 10 about the new bakery becoming popular?

• a) "Mrs. Baker decided to close her bakery."
  

• b) "Many townspeople forgot about Mrs. Baker."
  

• c) "Mrs. Baker was happy with her business."

• d) "The new bakery had flashy advertisements."

1. Which sentence should replace sentence 20 to emphasize the main point of this story and bring it to a more effective close?

• a) "Mrs. Baker's pastries were the best in town."

• b) "In the end, love for baking brought the community together."

• c) "The new bakery was very successful."

• d) "Mrs. Baker decided to retire."

1. What revision is needed in sentence 11 to enhance clarity?

• a) Change "This made Mrs. Baker sad" to "This upset Mrs. Baker."

• b) Remove "sad."
  

• c) Add "and she felt lonely."
  

• d) Change "This" to "The situation."

In sentence 12, what grammatical change should be made?

• a) Change "to come up with" to "to create."
  

• b) Change "but nothing seemed to work" to "but nothing worked."

• c) Remove "seemed."

• d) Change "new recipes" to "new desserts."

Which word in sentence 15 could be replaced for better variety?

• a) Replace "missed" with "longed for."
  

• b) Replace "pastries" with "treats."
  

• c) Replace "but" with "yet."
  

• d) Replace "drawn" with "attracted."

What revision is needed in sentence 16 to improve the flow?

• a) Change "Mrs. Baker decided to hold a special event" to "Mrs. Baker planned a special event."
  

• b) Remove "to hold."
  

• c) Change "to remind everyone" to "to remind the community."
  

• d) Add "exciting" before "special event."

In sentence 18, which word best describes the success of the event?

• a) "Massive" instead of "huge."
  

• b) "Moderate" instead of "huge."
  

• c) "Insignificant" instead of "huge."

• d) "Unexpected" instead of "huge."