Edit/Revise Test

Vincent needs to add a transition word or phrase to help his readers move from the first paragraph (sentences 1-9) to the second paragraph (sentences 10-17). Which transition could BEST be added to the beginning of sentence 10?

• A Once,

• B Then,

• C At first,

• D Right now,

Answer explanation

• Explanation: "Think about how the author is moving from talking about the problems with lunch to describing the current tables. They're shifting from one idea to another. Which word helps show that shift, like saying 'Now we're going to talk about...'?"

• Kid-Friendly Blurb: "Transitions are like bridges! They help you move from one idea to the next. Look for the word that shows a change in what the author is talking about."

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CCSS.W.4.3C

Look at sentence 26. The word faraway does not express what Vincent was trying to say. Which word could BEST replace faraway and help Vincent improve the meaning of this sentence?

• beyond

• farthest

• outside

• separate

Answer explanation

• Explanation: "The author wants to show David felt really separated from the other kids. 'Faraway' might not be the best word to show that feeling. Try to think of a word that shows he was as far away from the other kids as possible, and that he was seperated from them."

• Kid-Friendly Blurb: "Words have different shades of meaning! Choose the word that best paints the picture of how David felt."

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CCSS.L.4.3A

CCSS.L.4.4A

Where is the BEST place to insert this sentence?

• A At the beginning of the paragraph

• B After sentence 26

• C After sentence 28

• D This sentence should not be added to the paragraph.

Answer explanation

• Explanation: "The new sentence talks about David's experience after the tables changed. Where does it make the most sense to add that detail? Does it fit before, during, or after the description of the change?"

• Kid-Friendly Blurb: "Think about the order of events! Where does the new sentence fit best in the timeline of what happened to David?"

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CCSS.W.4.2A

CCSS.W.4.4

What is the BEST way to combine sentences 41 and 42?

• Now, the little kids aren't starving by the time they get to lunch, but the older students like having the cafeteria to themselves.

• Now, the little kids aren't starving by the time they get to lunch, and the older students like having the cafeteria to themselves.

• Now, the little kids aren't starving by the time they get to lunch, until the older students like having the cafeteria to themselves.

• Now, the little kids aren't starving by the time they get to lunch, because the older students like having the cafeteria to themselves.

Answer explanation

• Explanation: "The author is showing two things that are true at the same time. Which word helps connect these two ideas in a way that makes sense? Are the ideas contrasting, adding to each other, or showing cause and effect?"

• Kid-Friendly Blurb: "Connectors like 'and,' 'but,' and 'because' show how ideas relate! Choose the connector that makes the most sense."

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CCSS.L.4.1F

CCSS.L.4.2C

What change, if any, should be made in sentence 1?

• Change dedicating to dedicated

• Change Calcutta to calcutta

• Delete the comma after Calcutta

• No change should be made.

Answer explanation

• Explanation: "This sentence is missing something to make it a complete thought. Does it sound like it's missing a verb, or action word? Check the part about what Mother Teresa was doing."

• Kid-Friendly Blurb: "Every sentence needs a strong verb! Make sure the action matches the subject."

What change, if any, should be made in sentence 4?

• Change were to was

• Change very to vary

• Insert a comma after Church

• Make no change

Answer explanation

• Explanation: "Look at the subject of the sentence. Is it 'Mother Teresa' or 'Mother Teresa were'? Does the verb 'were' match the subject? And does the word very make sense in the sentence?"

• Kid-Friendly Blurb: "Subjects and verbs need to agree! Make sure they match in number."

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CCSS.L.4.2B

What is the correct way to write sentences 5 and 6?

• When she was 18 years old, she joined an Irish community of nuns, began her training in Dublin, Ireland.

• When she was 18 years old, she joined an Irish community of nuns, and began her training in Dublin, Ireland.

• When she was 18 years old, she joined an Irish community of nuns and began her training in Dublin, Ireland.

• Sentences 5 and 6 are correct in the paper.

Answer explanation

• Explanation: "How can we combine these two sentences into one smooth sentence? Do we need a comma and a connector, or can we just join them together? How many complete thoughts are in the answer choices?"

• Kid-Friendly Blurb: "Sometimes, you can join two short sentences to make one longer, better one! Look for the best way to connect the ideas."

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CCSS.L.4.1F

CCSS.L.4.2C

What change, if any, should be made in sentence 9?

• Change by to to

• Change opening to open

• Change childs to children

• No change is needed.

Answer explanation

• Explanation: "Think about the word 'childs.' Does that sound right? How do we make the word 'child' plural? Also look at the words 'by' and 'opening' and see if they are the best words for the sentence."

• Kid-Friendly Blurb: "Plural words need to be spelled correctly! And make sure you are using the correct words. Think about irregular plural nouns like mouse/mice and foot/feet."

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CCSS.L.4.1G

CCSS.L.4.3A

What change, if any, should be made in sentence 11?

• Change caring to care

• Change one to anyone

• Change to to too

• No change needs to be made.

Answer explanation

• Explanation: "Read the sentence carefully. Does the word 'caring' need to be changed? Also, look at the words 'one' and 'to' and see if a different word would make more sense."

• Kid-Friendly Blurb: "Sometimes, small words can make a big difference! Double-check the words you use."

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CCSS.L.4.1G

What change, if any, should be made in sentence 12?

• Delete the comma

• Change independent to independant

• Change others' to others

• No change should be made in sentence 12.

Answer explanation

• Explanation: "Look at the punctuation. Does the sentence need a comma? And does the word 'independent' have the correct spelling? Lastly, is the word 'others' used correctly?"

• Kid-Friendly Blurb: "Punctuation and spelling are important! Check for mistakes." Remember, you only put an apostrophe after a plural noun when it shows OWNERSHIP.