A New Pet - Revising and Editing

1. What revision, if any, should be made in sentence 13?

• F. It was night after night, and he just kept coming back again.

• G. Night after night, coming back is what he just kept doing.

• H. It was night after night of coming back, and he just kept coming.

• J. No change is needed.

Regan needs a better transition into the fourth paragraph (sentences 18- 22). Which sentence should replace sentence 18 to improve this transition?

• A. Eventually, Leroy was sleeping on our porch at night.

• B. In the past our neighbors had a big gray cat named George

• C..  After that we bought a small bag of cat food at the store.

• D, In the winter it usually gets dark outside around 6:00 P. M.

  Regan wants to add this sentence to the fifth paragraph (sentences 23- 27).

" He immediately claimed my room as his own."

Where is the BEST place to add this sentence?

• F. After sentence 23

• G. After sentence 24

• H. After sentence 25

• J. After sentence 26

Sentence 36 contains repeated information. What is the BEST way to revise this sentence?

• A. She studies the local humane society website every night now.

• B. She studies the local humane society to now look at it every night.

• C. She looks at it every night now, the local humane society website.

• D. She studies the local humane society website and looks at it every night now.