STATION 3: Revise and Edit

Which sentence should replace sentence 9 to BEST state the central idea of this paper?

• F. Mack’s morning habits have been robbing me of sleep, so I invented a solution.

• G. I don’t like the way Mack wakes up each morning because it’s super annoying.

• H. I invented something that allows me to sleep longer each morning.

• J. Mack shouldn’t be allowed to keep hitting his snooze button.

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Synthesis

Jonah needs a transition to help readers move from the first to the second paragraph. Which of the following sentences should he place at the beginning of paragraph 2 (sentences 10 – 12)?

• A. I want to tell you about Mack’s morning routine.

• B. Let me explain how the morning goes.

• C. Mack’s morning routine wasn’t working for me, so I thought about how to solve my problem.

• D. In order to solve my morning problem, I first analyzed the morning’s sequence of events.

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Jonah needs to add a detail to the second paragraph (sentences 10 – 12) to better explain why his invention works. Which of the following sentences should he add after sentence 11?

• F. Mack uses an alarm clock instead of a cell phone.

• G. Mack reads a lot of books, so the stack on his bedside table is quite large.

• H. Mack’s bed is across the room from mine.

• J. With each push, the clock gets closer and closer to the books.

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What is the BEST way to revise sentence 13?

• A. Upon analyzing the situation, I came up with an idea it is effective and super basic.

• B. Upon analyzing the situation, I came up with a super basic idea for an effective invention.

• C. Upon analyzing the situation, it is a super basic invention that is super effective.

• D. I came up with an idea for an effective invention it is super basic.

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Evaluation

Sentence 16 is repetitive. On the lines below, rewrite the sentence in a way that avoids repetition.

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Jonah wants to combine sentences 24 and 25 to create a strong conclusion for his paper. What is the BEST way to combine the sentences?

• F. Until then, I’m going to enjoy pleasantly sleeping extra and the mornings.

• G. Until then, I’m going to enjoy my pleasant mornings.

• H. Until then, I’m going to enjoy my extra sleep and my pleasant mornings.

• J. Until then, I’m going to enjoy my extra sleep, I will also enjoy my pleasant mornings!

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