Revising: Powering Up to Solve a Problem

1. 37. Veronica has included a redundant sentence in her first paragraph (sentences 1–7). Which sentence should be deleted from the paragraph?

• a. Sentence 2

• b. Sentence 3

• c. Sentence 4

• d. Sentence 5

38. 38. What is the most effective way to revise sentence 11?

• 1. a. He wanted to do something that solves practical problems, not only have a positive social impact.

• 1. b. He wanted to do something that not only solves practical problems but could have a positive

• 1. c. Solving practical problems that could have a positive social impact is what something he wanted to do.

• d. Doing something that solves practical problems, but could have a social impact is what he wanted.

1. 39. Veronica wants to improve the transition between the third paragraph (sentences 10–13) and fourth paragraph (sentences 14–19). Which sentence should replace sentence 14 to accomplish this goal?

• 1. a. After six years of being his own boss, Nyakarundi was prepared to take on a new challenge.

• 1. b. Interestingly, the second business Nyakarundi started was in the field of technology. 

• 1. c. Of course, Nyakarundi had proven his success in trucking, and so a new project was bound to succeed.

• 1. d. Having grown interested in other things, Nyakarundi made the choice finally to do more stuff.

1. 40. What sentence would best follow and support sentence 25?

• 1. a. Franchise owners have an important role to play in this business model.

• 1. b. These owners lease their kiosk directly from ARED with only a $100 down payment and ongoing payments of $200.

• c. An important skill for any franchise owner is to be able to ride a bicycle and to have the strength to tow a kiosk

• 1. d. Nyakarundi just needs to find people to operate the kiosks and invest in his business.

1. 41. Veronica would like to add a topic sentence to her seventh paragraph (sentences 27–31). Which of the following sentences should be added before sentence 27 to accomplish this goal?

• 1. a. Nyakarundi also sees his idea as a form of aid for his community.

• 1. b. Nyakarundi loves the challenge of running his own business.

• 1. c. Wanting people to enjoy their work is Nyakarundi’s mission.

• 1. d. Most people are grateful for Nyakarundi’s help.

42. 42. The word Likewise is not an effective transition in sentence 30. Which transition word or phrase should replace Likewise?

• a. However

• b. For this reason

• 1. c. On the other hand

• 1. d. Nevertheless