Revise and Edit

Which sentence should replace sentence 5 to help create a more effective introduction for this story?

• She is such a great cook and makes delicious fried pickles too.

• This fall she had agreed to let me help her make her award-winning dessert.

• The ribbons are hanging in the kitchen, next to her refrigerator.

• I’m lucky that she lives close to me because I am able to see her often.

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TEKS.ELA.5.11B.I

Which sentence could BEST follow and support sentence 11?

• She keeps her favorite recipes in a little blue box.

• I wanted to copy the recipe, but she said there was no time.

• She usually prefers to bake in her own kitchen.

• It includes brown sugar, nutmeg, butter, eggs, and flour.

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TEKS.ELA.5.11B.II

What is the BEST way to revise sentence 20?

• Sometimes we turned on Grandma’s favorite radio station, closed our eyes, and listened to the music.

• Sometimes we turned on Grandma’s favorite radio station, closed our eyes and to listen to the music.

• Sometimes we turned on Grandma’s favorite radio station we closed our eyes and were listening to the music.

• Sometimes we turned on Grandma’s favorite radio station, and then we closed our eyes, and then we listened to the music.

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TEKS.ELA.5.11C

Sentence 31 needs to be revised. In the box provided, rewrite sentence 31 in a clear and effective way.

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TEKS.ELA.5.11C

Brice needs a better transition between the second paragraph (sentences 9–12) and the third paragraph (sentences 13–17). Which transition could BEST be added to the beginning of sentence 13?

• For example

• Afterward

• In comparison

• Furthermore

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TEKS.ELA.5.11B.I

What is the MOST effective way to combine sentences 16 and 17?

• On the playground they learn to share and communicate they learn to play with other children.

• On the playground they learn to share, communicate, and play with other children.

• On the playground with other children, they learn to communicate and play and share too.

• On the playground they learn with other children and share and communicate but play.

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TEKS.ELA.5.11C

Brice wants to use a more descriptive word than thoughts in sentence 19. Which word can BEST replace thoughts in this sentence?

• feelings

• words

• concerns

• talks

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TEKS.ELA.5.11C

Which sentence can BEST be added after sentence 34 to bring this paper to a more effective conclusion?

• Schools will probably build more playgrounds in the future.

• Young children are sure to benefit from a little more time at recess.

• Teachers will enjoy the break they get while students are at recess.

• Recess time can be held indoors when the weather is not as nice.

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TEKS.ELA.5.11B.I

What change should be made in sentence 3?

• Change when to because

• Insert a comma after used

• Change think to thought

• Change certain to certin

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TEKS.ELA.5.11D.X

What change, if any, should be made in sentence 7?

• Change call to called

• Change special to Special

• Change Oval to Ovel

• No change is needed.

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TEKS.ELA.5.11D