Revising and Editing STAAR Review

Lydia had all day to prepare for the dinner party, so not only was the food excellent, and also the house was spotless.

• NO CHANGE
• but
• so
• yet

The following sentence pair can be revised into one better sentence. Choose the sentence with the best revision.

The bicycle tire is flat. The bicycle tire is on the bike.

• The bicycle tire is on the bike and the bicycle tire is flat.

• The flat bicycle tire is on the bike.

• On the bike, the bicycle tire there is flat.

• The bicycle tire on the bike is flat.

What is the correct way to write sentences 23 and 24?

(23) Although many of the species that once made their home on Madagascar are now extinct. (24) Scientists are still making discoveries.

• Many of the species that once made their home on Madagascar are now extinct, scientists, however, are still making discoveries.

• Although many of the species that once made their home on Madagascar are now extinct and scientists are still making discoveries.

• Many of the species that once made their home on Madagascar are now extinct, but there are scientists. Who are still making discoveries.

• Although many of the species that once made their home on Madagascar are now extinct, scientists are still making discoveries.

Edit this: "The storm is approaching" he whispered.

• "The storm is approaching." he whispers,

• "The storm is approaching," he whispered.

• "The storm is approaching," he whispers.

• The storm is approaching, he whispers,

Is the following sentence a complete sentence or a fragment?

I am planning a surprise barbecue for Lucas Sinclair's birthday. If it rains, we will have to move the party inside.

• Complete sentence

• Fragment

Which of the following is a "showing" detail?

• It was fall.

• It was August.

• Leaves crunched beneath his feet.

• It was pretty out.

He was learning how to solve equations. He found a trick that would make it easier.
 
What is the most effective way to combine the 2 sentences? 

• While learning how to solve equations, he found a trick that would make it easier.
• He was learning how to solve equations because he found a trick that would make it easier.
• While learning how to solve equations, a trick that he figured out made it easier.
• He was learning to solves the equations, then, he found a trick that would make it easier. 

What is the most effective revision to make in sentence 14?

(14) And at the age of 17, she was playing for the University of North Carolina, where she helped her team win four NCAA championships and breaking many school records along the way.

• And at the age of 17, she was playing for the University of North Carolina, she helped her team win four NCAA championships and broke many school records along the way.

• And at the age of 17, she was playing for the University of North Carolina and won four NCAA championships and breaking many school records along the way, which helped her team.

• And at the age of 17, she was playing for the University of North Carolina, which helped her team win four NCAA championships and breaking many school records along the way.

• And at the age of 17, she was playing for the University of North Carolina, where she helped her team win four NCAA championships and broke many school records along the way.

What is the best change we can make to this sentence: 

After a few more questions and a breif pause, the quiz continued.

• Change few to fewer
• Change breif to brief
• Change the , to a ;
• No change needs to be made

Which transition word is used to reveal a cause/effect relationship?

• Similarly,

• Therefore,

• In conclusion,

• Although...,