Unit 6 Revising and Editing Set 1 and Set 2

Neil has not effectively introduced the setting. How could Neil revise sentence 1 to accomplish this goal?

• The 2012 Olympic and Paralympic Games were ushered in by the unveiling of the ArcelorMittal Orbit.

• London unveiled the ArcelorMittal Orbit just in time for the 2012 Olympic and Paralympic Games.

• Amid landscaped lawns and marshy wetlands, the ArcelorMittal Orbit towers over the city of 8 million.

• Composed of enough steel to make 265 double-decker buses, the ArcelorMittal Orbit is a massive structure.

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Neil has left out an important fact. Which sentence should Neil add after sentence 2?

• The tower’s playful design delights visitors of all ages from around the world.

• Its name honors the company that donated the steel, 60% of which is recycled, and honors the spiral shape of the structure.

• The View Tube, nestled behind the ArcelorMittal Orbit, is a fabulous community café that serves excellent tea and cakes.

• Secured with 35,000 bolts, the ArcelorMittal Orbit is one of the most striking sculptures in the world.

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Neil wants to strengthen the structure of his text. Which transition could Neil add to the beginning of sentence 3?

• Suddenly

• In fact

• Later

• In addition

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The text ends abruptly. Which sentence should Neil add to the end of his text to provide a more structured conclusion?

• You had better not blink, or you might miss the beauty that is and surrounds the Slide at ArcelorMittal Orbit.

• The corkscrew section of the slide is called the “bettfeder,” which means “bedspring” in German.

• Velocity increases as the tight loops give way to a straight run back down to earth.

• Only the best and bravest can convince themselves to try it!

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Julián needs a more structured central idea. Which sentence BEST replaces sentence 3 to improve the central idea of his paper?

• It is a wonder that such a simple design could interest the public for nearly two centuries.

• How did this useful item become a do-it-yourselfer’s craft staple?

• But where did the Mason jar originate and how did it gain such popularity?

• Before the Mason jar became a common craft supply, it was a useful invention.

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Julián needs a more effective transition at the beginning of sentence 14. Which transition should replace Meanwhile?

• In the first place

• Equally important

• For that reason

• Not to mention

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Julian left out the following sentence from his fourth paragraph (sentences 15-18)

This is the reason many jars you see are embossed with the company "Ball" logo and the word "MASON."

Where is the BEST place to insert this sentence?

• After sentence 15

• After sentence 16

• After sentence 17

• After sentence 18

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Which supporting fact BEST follows sentence 21?

• Because Mason allowed his patent to expire, he died penniless.

• Not only do Mason jars come in a variety of sizes, they also come in a variety of shapes and colors.

• A quick Internet search will provide suggestions for using Mason jars at birthday parties, weddings, and baby showers.

• Mason jars are available in a variety of sizes that make them perfect for storing herbs and spices, pens and pencils, or nuts and bolts.

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Julián wants to improve the structure of his conclusion. Which sentence should follow sentence 22 to bring his paper to a more effective close?

• Who would have dreamed a tinsmith would become famous for making a glass storage jar?

• Mason jars are easy to find at flea markets or supermarkets.

• From blue hydrangeas to white calla lilies, Mason jars make perfect vases for all flowers.

• Since its invention in the 1800s, the Mason jar has continued to prove it is here to stay.