Editing and Revising STAAR

Chun has written a weak central idea for her paper. Which sentence should replace

sentence 10 to provide a better central idea for this paper?

• Today Tomie dePaola has probably read hundreds of books.

• Today Tomie dePaola is just one of many great authors.

• Today there is a book about one of Tomie dePaola's sisters.

• Today Tomie dePaola is one of America's most beloved authors.

Chun wants to use a more descriptive phrase in sentence 8. Which phrase should

replace a fun thought in this sentence?

• an old idea

• a big dream

• an easy job

• a good book

What is the BEST way to revise sentence 15?

• He has even won some books and awards,

• He has even won for some of his books some awards.

• He has even won awards for some of his books.

• He has for some of his books even won awards for books.

Archie wants to improve the topic sentence of the fourth paragraph (sentences 18—

23). Which sentence should replace sentence 18?

• We usually eat dinner around 7:00 p.m. on weekends.

• Cooking has become one of my favorite hobbies.

• This wasn't the first time we had to make a new dinner plan.

• Mom and I worked together to assemble the pizzas.

Archie wants to combine the ideas in sentences 2 and 3. In the space provided,

write a new sentence that combines these ideas in a clear and effective way.

Archie wants to use a more effective word than fine in sentence 25. What is the

BEST word for him to use?

• delicious

• famous

• uncommon

• pleasing

Daisy wants to add a closing sentence to the third paragraph (sentences 11—

16). Which sentence could BEST be added after sentence 16 to help close this

paragraph?

• The tables can be too close together for your dog.

• Dogs don't always like being out, especially at night.

• Your dog might know how to do a few tricks.

• This would make everyone feel bad, even your dog.

How should sentence 18 be revised so that it does not repeat information?

• People should be able to relax and enjoy a meal.

• People should be able to relax but enjoy a meal and people.

• People should relax and enjoy to be able for a meal,

• People should be able to relax, so people should enjoy a meal.

Which sentence would BEST follow and support sentence 12?

• Recess was usually held outside in the winter.

• It was still really early in the school year.

• Learning had always been important to Mr. Walker.

• They simply were not used to this new schedule.

What is the BEST way to revise sentence 21?

• Some of the kids in paying attention in the past had been having trouble.

• In the past some of the kids had been having trouble paying attention.

• They had been having trouble in the past in paying attention for some of

  the kids.

• Paying attention for some of the kids in the past had been having

  trouble.