Editing & Revising: A Trip to the Science Museum

What change should be made to sentence 2?

• Add a comma after “excited”

• Change “could” to “can”

• Change “sit” to “sat”

• Add a period after “excited”

What is the best way to revise sentence 4?

• She tells us to stay with our group and don’t touch the displays.

• She told us to stay with our groups and not touch anything.

• She told us to stay with our groups and not to touch any of the displays.

• She tell us to stay with the group and no touch the displays.

What change is needed in sentence 5?

• Add a comma after “exhibit”

• Change “was” to “were”

• Add a period after “bones”

• Change “real” to “reel”

Which word should replace “telled” in sentence 4?

• tell

• told

• telling

• says

What is the correct way to fix sentence 7?

• Then we saw a show in the planet room. Where stars and planets are showed on the ceiling.

• Then we seen a show in the planet room where stars and planets were shown on the ceiling.

• Then we saw a show in the planet room where stars and planets are shown on the ceiling.

• Then we saw a show in the planet room and stars and planets shown.

What is the best way to revise sentence 8?

• It was dark, quiet, and we all looked up amazed.

• It was dark and quiet, and we all looked up in amazement.

• It was dark and quiet we looked up amazed.

• It was dark, quiet, and we look amazed.

What should be added to sentence 11?

• Add commas after “glue” and “water”

• Capitalize “coloring”

• Change “and” to “but”

• Change “green” to “Greene”

What is the correct change to sentence 12?

• Change “helped” to “helps”

• Add a comma after “stir”

• Change “that” to “then”

• No change is needed

Which sentence needs to be broken into two sentences for clarity?

• Sentence 3

• Sentence 5

• Sentence 7

• Sentence 10

What is the best way to fix sentence 14?

• The field trip was fun and I hope we get to go again next year.

• The field trip was fun, I hope we get to go again next year.

• The field trip was fun next year we go again.

• The field trip is fun and we go again.