IELTS - Task 2 Revision

Original: "Recreational activities are an important part of physical health, mental health, and social connection with each other."

Which is the best improved version?

• Recreational activities help people to do fitness and talk to others.

• Recreational activities are helpful for health and talking with people.

• Recreational activities are good for body and people communication.

• Recreational activities play a vital role in promoting physical health, mental well-being, and social interaction.

Original: "They will learn some activities like swimming, hiking, and sports to improve fitness and overall well-being."

Choose the most natural, academic rewrite:

• These activities, such as swimming, hiking, and sports, enhance physical fitness and overall well-being.

• People will do swimming and sports to have good health.

• These activities is helpful for better body and well-being.

• These people go to swimming and improve health.

Original: "While others might think they are simply a waste of time."

Choose the best formal alternative:

• Some people thinking it's wasting the time.

• On the other hand, some argue that such activities are merely time-consuming and unproductive.

• Others think it’s not important and is boring.

• Some are thinking activities is wasteful.

Original: "Some activities may come with risks of injury, and too much gaming can lead to reduced productivity."

Choose the clearest, most academic version:

• Some activities might cause pain and laziness.

• Certain activities pose injury risks, and excessive gaming may negatively impact productivity.

• Many activities are very dangerous and useless.

• There is risk in activity and people cannot do work.

Original: "They are providing a way for people to relax and have fun, and improve human’s physical ability."
Best improved version:

• They help people to rest and be happy, and make them strong.

• People play and they get fun and energy.

• They serve as an outlet for relaxation, enjoyment, and physical development.

• It is for being relaxed and play for fitness.

Original: "These activities can range from outdoor sports and making a healthy body for people, like playing sports in daily life and running around the park..."

What’s the best revision?

• Recreational activities include outdoor sports such as jogging or team games, which contribute to a healthier body.

• Many people go run in park and play for health.

• Sport and games make people fit.

• Physical activities can do better fitness to you.

Original: "Improve strengthening muscles and reducing stress."

Choose the most accurate and complete version:

• It helps muscles and stops stress.

• Helps make body strong and remove stress.

• These activities strengthen muscles and reduce stress.

• People get strong body and no stress from them.

Original: "By the way, recreational activities can also be creative hobbies such as social gatherings and video games."

Choose a more academic transition and expression:

• By the way, games are for fun and meeting friends.

• Recreational is also for fun and talking people.

• Anyway, activity can do gathering and video games.

• Furthermore, recreational activities may include creative hobbies like social events or video games.

Original: "They can’t spend a lot of time doing these activities. It will waste their time and increase their stress."

Choose the clearest and most formal version:

• They do not want to do it and stress happen.

• Engaging in these activities may seem time-consuming to some and can contribute to increased stress levels.

• These people have too many things and don’t want to be relaxed.

• They not have time and then stress grows.

Original: "Even common activities like running or playing soccer. Can lead to muscle strains and hurtful way of people’s life."

Choose the grammatically correct, formal version:

• Soccer and running is hurt to people and life is bad.

• These things doing pain to body and not good for life.

• Even simple activities like running or playing soccer can result in injuries that negatively affect one’s lifestyle.

• Sport can lead people hurt and no good daily.