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WorksheetsSentence Rewriting Analysis Quiz
Total questions: 10
Worksheet time: 5mins
BEST revision move:
[BB] A few years ago she was trying to create artificial hands and to create artificial fingers that could hold small items, such as coffee cups and pencils.
Remove repetitive words/information
Change order of ideas
What revision, if any, is needed in this sentence?
[CC] Bahor studied the doll and discovered that its knee joints could be moved just as the joints in people's fingers moved.
No revision needed
Bahor studied the doll she discovered that its knee joints could be moved just as the joints in people's fingers move.
BEST revision move for this sentence:
[DD] The groom was wearing a blue flight suit and 240 miles above Earth on the International Space Station floating.
Change word order for clarity
Make two separate sentences
What revision, if any, is needed in this sentence?
[EE] The couple had wanted to get married in the same room, but when Malenchenko's mission was extended, they decided not to wait for his return.
The couple had wanted to get married in the same room when Malenchenko's mission was extended. And decided not to wait for his return.
No revision is needed
BEST revision move for this sentence:
[FF] The old money is shredded, and the old money is then used in a variety of ways.
Make two separate sentences
Remove repetitive words/information
What revision, if any, is needed in this sentence?
[GG] The hot air escaped, the balloon began to sink slowly.
As the hot air escaped, the balloon began to sink slowly.
No revision needed
BEST revision move:
[HH] He checked with a laptop computer that he had for checking electronic charts and weather maps.
Remove words and reorder ideas to eliminate repetitiveness
Separate ideas into two different sentences
What revision, if any, is needed in this sentence?
[II] Then he would move on, he would swish his tail in Rabbit's angry face.
Then he would move on and swish in Rabbit's angry face his tail.
Then he would move on, swishing his tail in Rabbit's angry face.
BEST revision move:
[JJ] Possum loosened the scarf, and Possum leaped onto the dance floor.
Eliminate repeated subject and combine verbs with conjunction
Insert a comma to separate the two complete ideas
What is the MOST effective way to rewrite the ideas:
[MM] A museum guide explained that after their first record is released, it is 25 years later when artists are eligible for the Hall of Fame.
A museum guide explained that after their first record is released, it is 25 years later. When artists are eligible for the Hall of Fame.
A museum guide explained that artists are eligible for the Hall of Fame 25 years after their first record is released.
