What is the BEST way to revise sentence 19?

(18) One day I reached over and tried to pet him. (19) My mother shrieked about approaching strange animals and warned me. (20) The cat’s response wasn’t much better. (21) He hissed and jerked away, acting as if I had offended him.

Which transition word or phrase could BEST be added to the beginning of sentence 23?

(22) Subway Cat and I never got very close to each other after that. (23) Over time we formed a sort of friendship. (24) I would stare at him. (25) He would stare at me. (26) Sometimes, as he was leaving the train, he would turn back, proudly flick his tail, and meow. (27) Our simple relationship continued until, one Wednesday, he just wasn’t there.

What is the BEST way to combine sentences 34 and 35?

(28) For several weeks Subway Cat was absent. (29) Then one day, near the subway station, I saw him. (30) I was sure it was Subway Cat, but he looked different. (31) His fur was groomed and fluffed, and he wore a glittering collar. (32) An equally flashy woman was leading him . . . on a LEASH! (33) Clearly, the cat now had a human master— and he didn’t look happy about it. (34) He turned his golden eyes toward me. (35) He almost looked embarrassed.

Tyler wants to add a closing sentence to his paper. Which sentence could BEST follow sentence 40 and help bring his paper to a close?

(36) I hoped that Subway Cat would come to enjoy his new life, but I missed seeing him on the train. (37) Then, just when I had stopped looking for him, there he was! (38) Subway Cat was alone, lying on his usual seat and licking his paws. (39) At Eighth Street he got up and headed for the door. (40) Then he looked back, flicked his tail, and stared straight at me.

What change, if any, should be made in sentence 4?

(3) First we took turns measuring and pouring the ingredients into a large mixing bowl. (4) When it was time to add the sugar, I grabed a canister that was full of something white. (5) It wasn’t labeled, but I was sure it was sugar.

What change, if any, should be made in sentence 13?

(12) We slid several piping-hot cookies onto a plate. (13) Grinning from ear to ear, we brought are gift to Mom. (14) Her face lit up when she saw the treats we had made. (15) But when she took the first bite, her face wrinkled in disgust. (16) I wondered what was wrong with our birthday surprise.

What change, if any, should be made in sentence 24?

(22) Instead of sugar, I had used salt! (23) Although the homemade cookies looked delicious, they tasted horrible! (24) Mom, Chloe, and me all looked at one another. (25) Then we started laughing uncontrollably. (26) Mom laughed so hard that tears rolled down her cheeks.

How should sentence 28 be changed?

(27) I learned a couple of things that day. (28) First, if your going

to cook, you need to pay attention to the ingredients. (29) And to be

on the safe side, it’s a good idea to take a taste or two along the way.

(30) This can save you a lot of embarrassment later.

What change, if any, needs to be made in sentence 30?

(29) And to be on the safe side, it’s a good idea to take a taste or two along the way. (30) This can save you a lot of embarrassment later. (31) But more important than what I learned about cooking was the lesson I learned about giving. (32) Sometimes it really is the thought that counts.

What change, if any, should be made in sentence 33?

(32) Sometimes it really is the thought that counts. (33) Mom’s birthday present didn’t turn out as we had planned but she knew that we loved her. (34) And that’s what really matters.

What is the correct way to write sentences 35 and 36?

(33) Mom’s birthday present didn’t turn out as we had planned but she knew that we loved her. (34) And that’s what really matters. (35) Besides, I don’t think we would have laughed nearly as hard. (36) If our cookies had been just perfect.