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Total questions: 20
Worksheet time: 15mins
(27) He later explained that he just wasn’t confident he would be able to land the kayak safe.
What change, if any, needs to be made in sentence 27?
Change explained to explains
Change confident to confidant
Change safe to safely
No change needs to be made in this sentence.
After a few more questions and a breif pause, the quiz continued.
Fatima realizes she has offered a weak thesis in this paper. Which of the following could replace sentences 1 and 2 and provide a more effective thesis statement for Fatima’s paper?
(1) Mia Hamm is a soccer player who is fun to study. (2) She is an expert at the sport who has encouraged others to play
Mia Hamm is an interesting and fun personality, and I am grateful for this opportunity to research her story. I think that as you read my paper, you will agree that she has added great energy to women’s sports in this country and also to sports around the world.
Mia Hamm is one of the most celebrated female soccer players of all time and is an inspiration to young women everywhere. Her contributions to women’s soccer have had an unmistakable impact on the sport, both in the United States and internationally.
There is a soccer player in this country that is clearly more talented than all the rest. Her name is Mia Hamm, and she is an outstanding player and a model athlete who works hard to make sure she is always setting an example for other athletes and for the world at large.
If you don’t know Mia Hamm, you probably don’t know much. Many people say that she is the greatest soccer player of all time because she is so supremely committed to soccer and also to all that it means to herself and the other people of the world.
(6) What caused these people to build an underground city in the Australian desert? (7) In 1915 14-year-old Willie Hutchison discovered some rich opal fields in the area. (8) After all, miners from all over the world flooded into the region to seek their fortunes.
Which transition should replace "After all" in sentence 8?
Soon
Instead
Finally
Otherwise
(32) “I am proud of Rafa’s decision,” he commented, and I think it is a great testament to his character and courage.”
What change, if any, needs to be made in sentence 32?
Insert quotation marks before the first and
Change I think to we think
Change testament to testiment
No change needs to be made in sentence 32.
What is the most effective revision to make in sentence 14?
(14) And at the age of 17, she was playing for the University of North Carolina, where she helped her team win four NCAA championships and breaking many school records along the way.
And at the age of 17, she was playing for the University of North Carolina, she helped her team win four NCAA championships and broke many school records along the way.
And at the age of 17, she was playing for the University of North Carolina and won four NCAA championships and breaking many school records along the way, which helped her team.
And at the age of 17, she was playing for the University of North Carolina, which helped her team win four NCAA championships and breaking many school records along the way.
And at the age of 17, she was playing for the University of North Carolina, where she helped her team win four NCAA championships and broke many school records along the way.
Which sentence is written correctly?
In the morning. the mat is rolled up and placed in a small closet.
In the morning, the mat is rolled up and placed in a small closet.
As the mat is rolled up and placed in a small closet, it is in the morning.
In the morning, the mat is rolled up, and placed in a small closet.
Dan and his wife Lisa have invented a new way of celebrating thanksgiving.
Change Dan to dan
Change invented to inventing
Change celebrating to celabrating
Change thanksgiving to Thanksgiving.
Revise this: The forest was very beautiful.
The forest was enchanting.
The forest made me very happy.
Redwoods stretched from the dense, green foliage into the blue sky.
The forest was big and majestic. There were trees everywhere.
Elizabeth had been studying for hours; ____________, she hoped to do well on the test.
similarly
therefore
nevertheless
however
Jared ate and ate; ____________ , he never gained weight.
nevertheless
furthermore
more over
in addition
Jared is an avid wrestler. ____________ to playing the sport, he loves to watch matches on television.
However
As a result
In addition
Meanwhile
Robert fell asleep in French class; ___________, he missed the entire lesson.
consequently
for example
in addition
in contrast
________ Cristo was extremely tired first period, he still managed to complete the assignment for the class.
As a result
Although
Furthermore
Meanwhile
Elliot, Daniel, and Elizabeth all wear eyeglasses; ___________, they need them for distance, not for reading.
moreover
whereas
similarly
in addition
____________ the school choir performance, Monica, Elizabeth, and Melissa sang the holiday songs in Spanish.
During
Because of
Finally
Instead of
Which of these sentences should Ms. Keller add at the beginning of the paragraph (sentences 7-15) to serve as the most effective position statement for her essay?
I think I would like the four-day school week because I would enjoy the extra time to rest on the weekend.
The four-day school week is a great idea for all students and parents, and even the school district would likely benefit.
We spend way too much time during the week in school, and it would be nice to have a three-day weekend for a part-time job or to just relax.
The four-day school week provides benefits that would help the students, teachers, and schools in our district.
Ms. Keller wants to add a quotation that will help support the idea presented in sentence 16. Analyze the quotations below. Which of these would be the most effective to insert after sentence 16?
One state official noted, "It's the same as giving the key to your house to a burglar."
The founder of Facebook once said, "When you give everyone a voice and give people power, the system usually ends up in a really good place."
"Our head of social media is the customer," said a spokesperson for one well-known company.
"We're all social creatures," one magazine states.
Which of these ideas could best follow and support sentence 23?
More than 150,000 people visit the small town each year, and a host of movies, including Kangaroo Jack, Mad Max Beyond Thunderdome, and Opal Dream, have all been filmed there.
Coober Pedy residents now make their livelihood in both the tourism industry and opal-mining industry, and this keeps most people working and able to provide for their families.
Today the people in this town get the vast majority of their water from under ground from a source 24 kilometers away that has to be pimped in via an underground pipeline.
Since February of 1915, many of the highest-quality opals in the entire world have been found in Coober Pedy; in fact, Coober Pedy is sometimes even referred to as the opal capital of the world.
Which of these details could best follow and support sentence 22?
Though she had injured her ankle badly in the game, Hamm still managed to take control of the ball and pass it to a teammate who then scored the winning goal.
Hamm held a record for the most international goals until June 2013, when her record was broken by another American, Abby Wambach.
For 17 years Hamm played with and often led the U.S. Women's National Soccer Team and she was U.S. Soccer's Female Athlete of the Year from 1994 to 1998.
Hamm received another great accolade in 2004, when she was included on a list of the 125 Greatest Living Soccer Players.
