Evaluate these topic and concluding sentences!

The trait provided is incorrect; she is not adventurous.

Lacks tie back to text.

Lacks a broader or universal insight.

It is correct as is -- no problems here, folks!

Lacks tie back to text

Lacks universal insights

Contains "you"

Uses pronoun "you" and is too wordy, AND lacks tie back to text.

Raises universal insight.

Evidence: "write the direct quote like this" (#).

Directly relates to what the topic sentence & rest of paragraph is about.

Ties the universal insight back to the text.

Often in life, people fail to take responsibility for their actions, but Roger’s actions show that being humble and making amends makes a huge difference.

In life, all people are deserving of a second chance.This is just like how Roger changes because of Mrs. Jones.

Thus, because of Mrs. Jones’ unexpected kindness, Roger becomes a more trustworthy person, showing readers that all people are deserving of a second chance.

All in all, Roger’s conflict with Mrs. Jones gives him the opportunity to prove himself a changed person, showing how kindness can bring out the best in others.

Title and author are included.

Personal pronouns are avoided, like "you" or "I."

R of RACER: Restates in one sentence.

A of RACER: Answers in a second sentence.

The question is answered specifically in a single sentence, including character names.

Roger struggles with doing the right thing in “Thank You M’am” by Langston Hughes because initially he steals to get what he wants even though he knows it’s wrong.

The main character has a conflict in "Thank You, M'am" and undergoes a change. The change is he becomes trustworthy.

In “Thank You M’am” by Langston Hughes, the main character changes from the beginning to the end of the story.

The main character, because of Mrs. Jones' tough love and kindness, is given a chance to prove himself trustworthy, showing the theme that all people deserve a second chance.

For example, in one of his shows, Snoop Dogg even sings the ABCs with kindergartners while wearing a suit and tie.

Snoop Dogg says, "Drink Hater-ade!" in his commercial for a sports drink for haters.

Snoop Dogg, a popular rapper who also became a game show host and actor, has proven himself to be versatile and multi-talented over the years.

His recent game show is called Doggy Fizzle Televizzle.

It's her grandfather who prompts Marta's a-ha moment. He teaches Martha to stay true to her values.

Marta's realization about an unfair situation reveals the theme that honor and integrity are worth more than winning in Marta Salina's "The Scholarship Jacket."

I can tell that Martha becomes more secure in herself in the story "The Scholarship Jacket" by Marta Salinas.

In the end, Martha's grandfather teaches her that people should not give in to bad influences or compromise their values, which inspires readers of all ages.

It does not end with a universal insight.

R = restate and A = answer ... it should be two sentences.

C of RACER -- It is missing evidence: "Cite quote like this" (#).

Looks pretty good to me exactly as it is ! Give that squirrel a nut!

All in all, Coach Franklin leads by example, and his family-centered approach shows how team motivation is built upon the support, friendship and encouragement of loved ones.

K.J. Hamler is a talented wide receiver and will most definitely go pro.

That is why Penn State has such a unique football program.

In life, you should always look for friends and loved ones to support you so you, too, can be successful.

Vary up transition words: All in all,...All things considered,...In the end,....Ultimately,... etc.

In life, ... (this is a proven technique, so it's good to rely on it for all RACECER paragraphs).

Include a final quote from the text, because the more evidence you offer, the better.

Begin by repeating all the key points you established above in the rest of the RACER.