The Revision Process

The Revision Process

by Cameron Netland

Poll

If you were involved in a play would you rather…

• Write it

• Direct it

• Act in it

Poll

What type of learner are you?

• Visual

• Auditory

• Kinesthetic

• Reading/Writing

Open Ended

Think of a class where you learned the most or think of your favorite class you’ve ever taken, what made learning in that class so easy?

​Discussion: Our Mandu

​Where does second person writing work best?

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​Are footnotes effective?

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​What does making the mandu represent for the narrator?

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​Do you have any special traditions in your family?

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​Note Time!

​The ten senses.

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​You will practice writing with sensory detail on the next slide.

Open Ended

Think of a moment from your personal narrative (Final draft due Friday, 09/24) that you can add sensory details to. Rewrite that paragraph or moment here using more sensory detail than you have in your draft. You may use this in your final copy.

​Showing versus Telling: Rule of Three Method

• ​Tell when the reader NEEDS information, show to bring the story to life.

• One of the best ways to  showinstead of tell is the “rule of three method.”

• ​It usually just means listing three items, using specific examples, and detailing moments of your story. 

• ​See the example on the right. 

From Practical Arguments: 

I was an impatient child who disliked obstructions: traffic jams, clogged bathtub drains, catsup bottles you had to bang. I liked to drop twigs into the stream that ran through our backyard, and watch them float downstream, coaxed around rocks and branches by the distant pull of the ocean. If they hit a snag I freed them.”

Open Ended

Practice the rule of three and list three items in a sentence to show a moment or a personality from your story. 

​Revision tip: CUPS & ARMS

​When we edit we use CUPS

​When we revise we use arms.

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​What do you notice are the differences between the two?

​Reminder: Final Draft of Narrative due on Friday at 9 AM

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​Once we complete the personal narrative we are going into Unit 2: The Rhetorical Analysis.

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