ALLIN_4.11c ELA Reteach

ALLIN_4.11c ELA Reteach

by Angela Valencia

Review before attempting the retake!

Before attempting the retake review and practice revising sentences. Practice the questions in this presentation until you are confident and comfortable revising. You will only be able to complete THIS retake once.

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​During this presentation, there will be a code word. Write down the code word!! You will be required to enter this word on the retake assessment to show that you reviewed all of the material.

Revising Sentences

​In this lesson, we will compare a mentor sentence to a revised example and identify what was added or changed, then write our own revision of the mentor sentence. You will need a piece of paper or your ELA journal and a pencil.

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​What is a mentor sentence? Mentor sentences are examples of good writing. The best mentor sentences are those that clearly illustrate a grammar rule or figurative language element.

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You can use mentor sentences to help you with your own writing!

​Mentor Sentence

​I was born a humble seed, on a simple sunflower, in an unremarkable field.

- The Bad Seed

​Mentor Sentence

​I was born a humble seed, on a simple sunflower, in an unremarkable field.

- The Bad Seed

​What do I notice about this sentence?

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• ​capital letter

• ​declarative (period)

• ​compound word -

​ sun | flower

• ​simple sentence

• ​commas

Time to Revise:​

​I was born a shy, humble seed, on a simple yellow sunflower, in an unremarkable field.

​​Mentor Sentence - I was born a humble seed, on a simple sunflower, in an unremarkable field.

- The Bad Seed

​Discuss

Now share with your learning coach what you notice that is different in the revised sentence and the original mentor sentence; discuss what changed.

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Although this sentence has been revised it is the SAME as the original- it has the same meaning. We don’t want to change the intention of the sentence.

​You Try!

​Revise the following mentor sentence by doing the following:

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• ​Add words

• ​Delete words

• ​Combine or rearrange ideas

Mentor Sentence​

​Whenever Ms. Franny has one of her fits, it reminds me of Winn-Dixie in a thunderstorm.

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​-Because of Winn-Dixie

Mentor Sentence​

​Whenever Ms. Franny has one of her fits, it reminds me of Winn-Dixie in a thunderstorm.

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​-Because of Winn-Dixie

​Share your revised sentence with your learning coach!

​Read and Revise

Now let's practice revising mentor sentences using a reading passage.

​​Read the following passages and answer the questions.

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Multiple Choice

The underlined word phrase in Sentence 6, below, is incorrect. What word phrase should replace it?

He even helped me build my science project last year when I had break my arm.

• has broken

• having a break

• had broken

• had breaked

​Explanation

The correct past perfect tense of "to break" is had broken. It is an irregular verb. The past perfect is used to describe an action that happened in the past before another discussed action.

Multiple Choice

The underlined word in Sentence 3, below, is misspelled. What is the correct spelling?

He is a college proffesor.

• pro

• professor

• proffesser

• proffessor

​Explanation

The correct spelling of the underlined word is professor. The f in the middle is single, but the s at the end is doubled. Also, it ends in the suffix -or, not "-er."

Multiple Choice

(6) The outside of a hedgehog is contained with sharp quills, but the underside of this animal is soft and fluffy.

The word contained is not the right word for sentence 6. Which word would better help describe the outside of the hedgehog?

• included

• covered

• wrapped

• colored

Multiple Choice

(8) For example, it's important not to frighten a hedgehog, especially when it's still getting to know you.

Roland needs to use a more appropriate transition at the beginning of sentence 8. Which of the following should replace For example?

• Therefore

• However

• In fact

• After that

Multiple Choice

(11) These animals don't shed the way some dogs and cats do.

Roland would like to add a sentence to the beginning of the fourth paragraph (sentences 11-14) to introduce the ideas in this paragraph. Which of the following would be the BEST sentence to add just before sentence 11?

• A hedgehog is a hard pet to care for.

• Hedgehogs don't shed, bark, or scratch the furniture.

• The hedgehog will be the perfect companion for you.

• There are many reasons why hedgehogs make great pets.

​Code Word

​pumpkin