Wednesday April 12

Multiple Choice

Which sentences can replace sentences 4 and 5 to create a more effective controlling idea for this paper?

• However, one swimmer, Sarah Thomas, has managed to go above and beyond all the rest. She set a new record by swimming the English Channel four times without stopping.

• But Sarah Thomas is a swimmer who yearned to do more. She has faced some challenging circumstances in her life and felt confident she was ready to tackle the English Channel.

• As a result, Sarah Thomas was able to accomplish something no swimmer had ever accomplished. She swam across the English Channel and set an impressive record.

• Yet Sarah Thomas was able to complete a swim that was an incredible feat. She made it across the English Channel with the help of a small team and was proud of her accomplishment.

Multiple Choice

Heike wants to add this sentence to the third paragraph of her paper (sentences 10-14)

"Finally, on Sunday, September 15, 2019, weather predictions looked favorable, and she set out early that morning."

Where is the best place to insert this sentence?

• After sentence 10

• After sentence 11

• After sentence 12

• After sentence 13

Multiple Choice

Heike would like to replace sentence 30 with a more appropriate and

relevant quotation. Which of the following can replace sentence 30 to

help emphasize a main point of this paper and bring the paper to a

more effective conclusion?

• As a Channel Swimming and Piloting Federation committee

  reported, “It was an outstanding feat of endurance and triumph

  over adversity. It is, quite simply, the English Channel swim of

  our age.”

• “If you want to swim across the English Channel from England to

  France—you have to leave your doubt on the beach in England,”

  endurance swimmer Lewis Pugh once said.

• “There are so many stories of people swimming in the same spot

  for hours until the tide turns,” says Colin Hill, a race organizer and

  member of the International Marathon Swimming Hall of Fame.

• “She started swimming when she was just a little tyke but

  didn’t know about open-water swimming until after college,”

  her stepfather Kent Maxson commented.

Multiple Choice

What is the most effective way to combine sentences 7 and 8?

• Natalia, who was in awe of O’Keeffe’s paintings of New York and

  its skyscrapers, was a teenager most inspired by the flowers and

  landscapes of New Mexico.

• Natalia was in awe of O’Keeffe’s paintings of New York and its

  skyscrapers, but it was the flowers and landscapes of New Mexico

  that most inspired the teenager.

• Being in awe of O’Keeffe’s paintings of New York and its

  skyscrapers, the flowers and landscapes of New Mexico most

  inspired the teenager Natalia.

• Because Natalia was in awe of O’Keeffe’s paintings of New York

  and its skyscrapers, the teenager was most inspired by the flowers

  and landscapes of New Mexico.

Multiple Choice

Which sentence would best follow sentence 21?

• According to her watch, they should have already arrived at her

  aunt’s house in Albuquerque.

• This was a long road trip, so no one had been surprised when she

  had decided to sleep for a good while.

• She was unsure about a number of things as she rubbed her eyes

  and looked out the window.

• As usual there was a lot of traffic on the highway to Albuquerque,

  so her dad had been driving slowly.

Multiple Choice

Julia would like a more effective closing for the fifth paragraph

(sentences 18–25). Which sentence can replace sentence 25 to help

Julia accomplish this goal?

• When Natalia’s dad opened his car door, he asked everyone to

  gather their things and quickly follow him inside.

• After a great deal of confusion, Natalia put the clues together and

  deduced that they were not going to go to her aunt’s house yet.

• Natalia understood that they had traveled to the museum and

  would subsequently be late getting to her aunt’s.

• When Natalia’s dad turned around and asked her if she would like

  to go into the museum, she squealed in delight.

Multiple Choice

What is the most effective way to revise sentence 27?

• Through room after room she moved slowly, paintings hung neatly

  on white walls.

• She moved slowly through room after room of paintings hung

  neatly on white walls.

• As she moved slowly through room after room, paintings on white

  walls hung neatly.

• She moved slowly through room after room of paintings on white

  walls that hung neatly.