Revising and Editing.

Clayton has written the following argumentative text to convince the readers that dragons were real. Read Clayton's paper and look for any revisions he should make. When you're finished reading, answer the questions that follow.

​The Day of the Dragon

(1) Though they may be extinct today, as are the dodo bird, the wooly mammoth, and the Tasmanian tiger, they did, indeed, once roam the earth. (2) Countless narratives from cultures throughout the world feature dragons as both predator and prey. (3) Until the dinosaur was coined by Sir Richard Owen in 1842, the word dragon was commonly used to refer to large, fearsome reptilian creatures. (4) The theory that dragons and humans did not coexist is just that- a theory, also known as dinosaurs. (5) That admission leads some historians to the conclusion that documented cases of dragon sightings may likely be true. (6) Just because we do not have photographic evidence to corroborate the claim does not prove dragons never existed. (7) No photos of the dodo or wooly mammoth have been substantiated by scientists either. (8) I believe in dinosaurs.

Multiple Choice

Clayton wants to improve the coherence in the introduction of his narrative. Wat sentence could Clayton insert before sentence 1?

• Dragons are not the only mythological creatures, but their name also refers to a futuristic spacecraft designed to deliver cargo.

• Images of fire-breathing, flying dragons may seem like fabrications of an active imagination, but dragons are real.

• The modern term for dragon is derived from the Latin word draco, meaning "a serpent of huge size."

• How to Train Your Dragon is a popular animated film series that was produced in 2010.

Multiple Choice

Clayton wants to improve the coherence of his narrative. Which of these is the BEST revision of sentence 4.

• The theory that dinosaurs, also known as dragons, and humans did not coexist is just that- a theory.

• The theory that dragons, also known as dinosaurs, and humans did not coexist is just that- a theory.

• The theory that dragons, also known ad dinosaurs- a theory- and humans did not coexist is just that.

• A theory- the theory that dinosaurs and humans, also known as dinosaurs, did not coexist is just that.

Dropdown

Clayton wants to make a connection between the ideas in sentences 6 and 7. Which transition would be BEST to add to the beginning of sentence 7?



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no photos of the dodo or wooly mammoth have been substantiated by scientists either.

Multiple Choice

Clayton's narrative does not end effectively. What sentence could Clayton add to improve the coherence of his conclusion?

• Why wouldn't I?

• There is no scientific proof they did not exist.

• The evidence supporting their existence is too compelling to ignore.

• They are so cool!

​In the following informational text, Kenya describes the medieval period of British history.

​The Mona Lisa

Multiple Choice

What is the BEST revision to make in sentence 2 to improve its focus?

• A student of science, art, and optical illusion, da Vinci sketched his model, Lisa del Giocondo, the wife of a prominent silk manufacturer and government official.

• A student of science, art, and optical illusion, da Vinci sketched his model, Lisa del Giocondo, on a plank of poplar to which he had applied a primer coat of lead white.

• Da Vinci sketched his model, Lisa del Giocondo, a student of science, art, and optical illusion, on a piece of wood.

• Da Vinci sketched his model, Lisa del Giocondo, a student of science, art, and optical illusion, on a piece of wood instead of the traditional stretched canvas.

Multiple Choice

Kenya would like to add an example to support te idea she presented in sentence 5. Which sentence could BEST follow and provide support for sentence 5?

• This style of painting, portraits that depict the subject before a sweeping landscape, became the new norm.

• The soft folds of her garments enhance the realism for which the painting is noted.

• Her smile seems to shift from genuine delight to aloof indifference, making the Mona Lisa the epitome of feminine mystery.

• The Mona Lisa can be seen at the Louvre in Paris, France.

Multiple Choice

Kenya has left an important detail out of the second paragraph (sentences 6-8).

"Minstrels played and sang while jesters entertained her with foolish antics, jokes, and jibes."

Where is the BEST place to insert this sentence?

• Before sentence 6

• After sentence 6

• After sentence 7

• After sentence 8

Multiple Choice

Kenya's closing is weak. Which of these sentences could be added to the end of the second paragraph (sentences 6-8) to create coherence across paragraphs?

• That little coincidence is certainly something to smile about.

• Her first name, Lisa, is a shortened form of Elizabeth, which means "satisfaction."

• Some art historians question the authenticity of the portrait.

• Despite overwhelming evidence to support the claim, there is still some debate as to the identity of the subject of the Mona Lisa.

​In the following paper Gabriella hopes to persuade readers to improve their communication skills.

​Communication 101

Multiple Choice

Gabriella wants to strengthen the introduction of her text. Which of the following is the BEST replacement for sentence 2?

• An adage is a proverb or short statement expressing a general truth.

• When communication is effective, all parties feel understood and valued, thus, reducing the opportunity for misunderstanding.

• After all, wise men speak because they have something to say; fools speak because they have to say something.

• Communication can be defined as the imparting or exchanging of information.

Dropdown

What transition could be added to the beginning of sentence 7 to improve the connection between sentences 6 and 7? ​

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nonverbal cues may reinforce or contradict our verbal messages, so it is crucial that we monitor our facial expressions and body language to enhance verbal communication.

Multiple Choice

Which sentence can be added between sentences 7 and 8 to maintain coherence within the paragraph?

• Sit up straight and tall to convey confidence in the message you wish to communicate.

• Leaning in slightly causes you to appear more interested in what the speaker has to say.

• Now that you're more aware of ways to communicate your message, consider ways to improve your listening skills.

• Most people don't really listen; instead, they formulate what they would like to say in response while the other person is talking.

Multiple Choice

Gabriella's text ends abruptly. Which sentence can be added to the end of this paper to close it more effectively?

• Negative body language includes folding one's arms across the body in a closed gesture.

• If you are a trusted listener, friends and family will be more likely to seek you out in times of need.

• No matter the door you wish to open, communication can be the key.

• The use of correct standard English is sure to impress the most critical listener.