Revising and Editing BLUE

Multiple Choice

Salvador’s teacher asked him to journal about his weekend. This paragraph is from his journal. Read his writing carefully, and look for corrections Salvador needs to make. Then answer the questions that follow.

(1) My mom surprised me with a day trip on Saturday to the Blue Hole. (2) I had never went to New Mexico so that changed last weekend. (3) This refreshing water feature is an exciting place to visit. (4) My mom and me decided to jump into the freezing water. (5) It was over eighty feet deep! (6) We watched scuba divers with oxygen tanks and wetsuits dive deep into the crystal clear oasis. (7) My mom asked what my favorite part of the trip was when we were drivving home. (8) Watching the scuba divers was interesting, but instead swimming with my mom was more fun.

What is the best way to rewrite sentence 2?

• I never traveled to New Mexico before, and that changed last weekend.

• I had never traveled to New Mexico before, but that changed last weekend.

• I had never traveled to New Mexico before, for that changed last weekend.

• I had never traveled to New Mexico before and that changed last weekend.

Multiple Choice

Salvador’s teacher asked him to journal about his weekend. This paragraph is from his journal. Read his writing carefully, and look for corrections Salvador needs to make. Then answer the questions that follow.

(1) My mom surprised me with a day trip on Saturday to the Blue Hole. (2) I had never went to New Mexico so that changed last weekend. (3) This refreshing water feature is an exciting place to visit. (4) My mom and me decided to jump into the freezing water. (5) It was over eighty feet deep! (6) We watched scuba divers with oxygen tanks and wetsuits dive deep into the crystal clear oasis. (7) My mom asked what my favorite part of the trip was when we were drivving home. (8) Watching the scuba divers was interesting, but instead swimming with my mom was more fun.

What change should be made to sentence 4?

• Change my mom and me to my mom and I

• Change freezing to frozen

• Change jump to jumped

• Change decided to decide

Multiple Choice

Salvador’s teacher asked him to journal about his weekend. This paragraph is from his journal. Read his writing carefully, and look for corrections Salvador needs to make. Then answer the questions that follow.

(1) My mom surprised me with a day trip on Saturday to the Blue Hole. (2) I had never went to New Mexico so that changed last weekend. (3) This refreshing water feature is an exciting place to visit. (4) My mom and me decided to jump into the freezing water. (5) It was over eighty feet deep! (6) We watched scuba divers with oxygen tanks and wetsuits dive deep into the crystal clear oasis. (7) My mom asked what my favorite part of the trip was when we were drivving home. (8) Watching the scuba divers was interesting, but instead swimming with my mom was more fun.

What change should be made to sentence 7?

• Change mom to Mom

• Change drivving to driving

• Delete was

• Change was to were

Multiple Choice

Salvador’s teacher asked him to journal about his weekend. This paragraph is from his journal. Read his writing carefully, and look for corrections Salvador needs to make. Then answer the questions that follow.

(1) My mom surprised me with a day trip on Saturday to the Blue Hole. (2) I had never went to New Mexico so that changed last weekend. (3) This refreshing water feature is an exciting place to visit. (4) My mom and me decided to jump into the freezing water. (5) It was over eighty feet deep! (6) We watched scuba divers with oxygen tanks and wetsuits dive deep into the crystal clear oasis. (7) My mom asked what my favorite part of the trip was when we were drivving home. (8) Watching the scuba divers was interesting, but instead swimming with my mom was more fun.

What is the best way to rewrite sentence 8?

• Watching the scuba divers was interesting, so swimming with my mom was more fun.

• Watching the scuba divers was interesting, and swimming with mom was more fun.

• Watching the scuba divers was interesting because swimming with my mom was more fun.

• Watching the scuba divers was interesting, but swimming with my mom was more fun.

Multiple Choice

Salvador’s teacher asked him to journal about his weekend. This paragraph is from his journal. Read his writing carefully, and look for corrections Salvador needs to make. Then answer the questions that follow.

(1) My mom surprised me with a day trip on Saturday to the Blue Hole. (2) I had never went to New Mexico so that changed last weekend. (3) This refreshing water feature is an exciting place to visit. (4) My mom and me decided to jump into the freezing water. (5) It was over eighty feet deep! (6) We watched scuba divers with oxygen tanks and wetsuits dive deep into the crystal clear oasis. (7) My mom asked what my favorite part of the trip was when we were drivving home. (8) Watching the scuba divers was interesting, but instead swimming with my mom was more fun.

Salvador wants to add another detail to his story. Read the sentence below, and decide where he should insert it.

It took us about two hours to drive from our home in Amarillo to The Blue Hole of Santa Rosa.

• Before sentence 1

• Between sentence 2 and sentence 3

• Between sentence 3 and sentence 4

• Between sentence 7 and sentence 8