OCT10 Lesson and Ind Work Writing a Draft

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Grade 4 Read/Write

Teacher Facing
October 10, 2024

Unit 2: Contemporary Fiction

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Carlos rested a notebook
against the fence nearby and
began writing in it.

When they came to the giraffe
feeding station, Sebastian was
certain Carlos would pay
better attention.

Sebastian shook his head.
Why would anyone come to a
zoo if not to see the animals?

“Why do I even care?”
Sebastian thought. “It doesn’t
hurt me if he wastes this entire
trip because he’s got his nose
in a notebook.”

Sebastian ached to scream,
“Put that down and pay
attention to the animals!”

His brother muttered, “Hmm,”
then buried himself in his
notebook again.

Sebastian bought a handful of
lettuce and held the bunch over
the railing.

“Sorry, little buddy. You were
paying attention to the
animals, just not in the way I
was. I’m glad we’ll have these
drawings of our visit.

He briefly stroked the velvet
nose and then turned toward
Carlos, who was busily
marking in his notebook.

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Prompt: Explain how Sebastian's attitude towards
Carlos changes throughout their zoo visit.

Irrelevant Details

Relevant Details

Grade 4 Read/Write

Unit 2: Contemporary Fiction

October 10, 2024

Multiple Choice

Click on the image to enhance. READ AND ANSWER THE YELLOW SIDE ONLY.

• A

• B

• C

• D

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Father placed the candle rods across the poles, like the
rungs of a ladder. Mother heated the starter pot until the
hard wax melted into a clear, green liquid. Candle molds
were scarce because they were very expensive. Most
colonial families made their candles by dipping. A candle
rod with a row of wicks was dipped in the liquid wax.
Read the dictionary entry for the word mold.

Excerpt from “Making Candles 1750s Style” used with permission from HMH © Houghton Mifflin Harcourt Publishing Company.

The neighbor raced back to his wife to tell her about
the amazing mill. One day, when the old couple was
away, the neighbors entered their house—the old
couple never locked their door, as they distrusted no
one—and stole the mill. They bought a horse and
carriage and set off down the coast, where no one
would know them.

Excerpt from “Why the Sea is Salty” used with permission from HMH © Houghton Mifflin Harcourt Publishing Company.

Which definition most closely fits the way the word
mold is used in the text?

A.Definition 1
B.Definition 2
C.Definition 3
D.Definition 4

What does distrusted mean in the paragraph?

A.expected
B.believed
C.doubted
D.invited

mold /mōld/ noun

1. a hollow form used to give shape to a soft or liquid
substance
2. a distinctive or typical style
3. a frame or template for producing moldings
4. a fungus that grows on the surface of plant or animals
materials

DO NOW

Multiple Choice

Click on the image to enhance. READ AND ANSWER THE PURPLE/PINK\ SIDE ONLY

• A

• B

• C

• D

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Ⓡ 4.7(C) use text evidence to support an appropriate response OCT10

Ⓢ 4.11(A) plan a first draft by selecting a genre for a particular topic, purpose, and audience using a range of strategies such as brainstorming,

freewriting, and mapping

Unit 2: Contemporary Fiction

LO: SWBAT use text evidence to plan
a first draft.

DOL:

Given a fiction text, students will

correctly use text evidence to plan a first
draft in at least 4 of 5 questions.

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Ⓡ 4.7(C) use text evidence to support an appropriate response OCT10

Ⓢ 4.11(A) plan a first draft by selecting a genre for a particular topic, purpose, and audience using a range of strategies such as brainstorming,

freewriting, and mapping

Unit 2: Contemporary Fiction

Real World Connection:
It is important to plan
ahead.

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Ⓡ 4.7(C) use text evidence to support an appropriate response OCT10

Ⓢ 4.11(A) plan a first draft by selecting a genre for a particular topic, purpose, and audience using a range of strategies such as brainstorming,

freewriting, and mapping

Unit 2: Contemporary Fiction

HOT Question: Why is
it important to plan a
draft first before
writin?g

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relevant details

(noun)

the most significant pieces
of information that support

a response

draft
(noun)

a rough piece of writing
that needs more work

Academic Vocabulary

brainstorming

(noun)

a technique in which

many ideas are

generated quickly and
without judgment or

evaluation

Match

Match the Academic Vocabulary to its definition.

• relevant details

• brainstorming

• draft

significant pieces of information

a rough piece of writing that needs help

to generate many ideas in your mind

• significant pieces of information

• a rough piece of writing that needs help

• to generate many ideas in your mind

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Today we will begin writing

an Extended Constructed

Response

Extended

Constructed

Response

An ECR will have two pieces of text evidence.

An ECR will have two ...

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An Extended Constructed

Response…

Extended

Constructed

Response

● is a well-developed and

organized essay written in
response to a text

● is supported by relevant text

evidence

● shows consistency of

language conventions

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● is a scoring tool or

guide used to
evaluate an ECR.

● describes the

features expected
for a student’s
response to receive
each of the points
on the chosen level.

An Extended-Constructed Response Rubric…

We will look at the RUBRIC closer.

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crouched

(verb)

to lower the body
close to the ground
by bending the legs

astonishingly

(adverb)

to fill with great

surprise or
amazement

quarreling

(verb)

to argue or disagree in

an angry way

Content Vocabulary

Match

Match the correct Content Vocabulary to its definitiion.

• crouched

• quarelling

• astonishingly

to lower the body close to the ground by

to argue or disagree

to fill with surprise or amaxement

• to lower the body close to the ground by

• to argue or disagree

• to fill with surprise or amaxement

Open Ended

Can you think of an animal that crouches? Type your answer in your best spelling.

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To View at

the Zoo

Read

Stop

Jot!

Read the text

Stop and ask yourself:

●what is happening in the text?

●what relevant details lead to
Sebastian understanding
Carlos?

●what evidence supports your
answer?

This is important!

Underline key words

or details

I don’t understand

Readers are expected to…

1

2

3

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Writing Process Review

Planning

Drafting

Revising

Editing
Publishi

ng

● Determine

topic,
purpose, and
genre,
audience.

● Brainstorm

and
map/organize
ideas.

● Write a rough

draft.

● Include…
○ central idea

(informational
) or claim
(argumentativ
e

○ text evidence
○ conclusion

● Improve

organization,
development
of ideas, and
word choice.

○ add
○ delete
○ combine
○ rearrange

● Proofread

and correct
any
mistakes.

● Check…
○ spelling
○ capitalizatio

n

○ punctuation
○ grammar

● Write or type

the corrected
final copy.

● Share with

audience/
readers.

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To plan and write an extended-constructed response essay,
you must determine…

Purpose

Audience

Topic

Genre

Planning an ECR

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Purpose

Audience

Topic

Genre

The genre of an

essay determines its
form and structure.

Informational or
Argumentative

Definition

Examples

The topic is the
particular subject
the writer writes

about.

The purpose is the

reason for your

writing.

The audience is the
group of people who
will read your essay,
or who you write it

for.

★ recycling
★ friendship
★ benefits of

healthy foods

★ To inform,
★ To explain,
★ To convince…

★ group of people
★ students
★ kids
★ adults…

Topic, Purpose, and genre slide.

Match

Click on the image to enhance. Match the topic, purpose, and genre.

• topic

• purpose

• genre

to explain Sebastians attitude

to write an informational essay

informational

• to explain Sebastians attitude

• to write an informational essay

• informational

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What is the topic?

Analyze the Prompt

Read the text “To View at the Zoo.” Based on the details in the
text, write a response to the following:

Explain how Sebastian's attitude towards Carlos changes
throughout their zoo visit.

Write a well-organized informational essay that uses specific
evidence from the text to support your answer.

Remember to —
• clearly state your central idea
• organize your writing
• develop your ideas in detail
• use evidence from the text in your response
• use correct spelling, capitalization, punctuation, and grammar

Manage your time carefully so that you can —
• review the text
• plan your response
• write your response
• revise and edit your response

The topic is ....

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What is the genre?

information, fictional, persuasive

Analyze the Prompt

Read the text “To View at the Zoo.” Based on the details in the
text, write a response to the following:

Explain how Sebastian's attitude towards Carlos changes
throughout their zoo visit.

Write a well-organized informational essay that uses specific
evidence from the text to support your answer.

Remember to —
• clearly state your central idea
• organize your writing
• develop your ideas in detail
• use evidence from the text in your response
• use correct spelling, capitalization, punctuation, and grammar

Manage your time carefully so that you can —
• review the text
• plan your response
• write your response
• revise and edit your response

The genre is ...

Open Ended

Who is going to be the audience of this writing you are about to complete?

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Analyze the Prompt

Read the text “The View at the Zoo.” Based on the
details in the text, write a response to the following:

Explain how Sebastian's attitude towards Carlos
changes throughout their zoo visit.

What should we focus on while reading "The View at the Zoo" in order to answer the prompt our best way.

In order to write our best we need to focus on ... and his ....

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Relevant details are .....

Relevant Details

Irrelevant details are

Irrelevant Details

Readers must determine which details
are… TURN AND TALK

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the most significant pieces of

information that support a

response

Relevant Details

the pieces of information that

do not support a response

Irrelevant Details

Readers must determine which details
are…

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Analyze the Prompt

Read the text “The View at the Zoo.” Based on the
details in the text, write a response to the following:

We are now going to look at relevant and irrelevant details that will support our essay.

What would relevant details be for this prompt?

Relevant details for this prompt would be details that..

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Relevant Details

Irrelevant Details

Carlos rested a notebook against
the fence nearby and began writing
in it.

When they came to the giraffe
feeding station, Sebastian was
certain Carlos would pay better
attention.

Sebastian shook his head. Why
would anyone come to a zoo if not
to see the animals?

“Why do I even care?” Sebastian
thought. “It doesn’t hurt me if he
wastes this entire trip because he’s
got his nose in a notebook.”

Sebastian ached to scream, “Put
that down and pay attention to the
animals!”

His brother muttered, “Hmm,” then
buried himself in his notebook
again.

Sebastian bought a handful of
lettuce and held the bunch over the
railing.

“Sorry, little buddy. You were paying
attention to the animals, just not in
the way I was. I’m glad we’ll have
these drawings of our visit.

He briefly stroked the velvet nose
and then turned toward Carlos, who
was busily marking in his notebook.

Prompt: Explain how Sebastian's attitude towards
Carlos changes throughout their zoo visit.

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Prompt: Explain how Sebastian's attitude towards
Carlos changed by the end their zoo visit.

Irrelevant Details

Carlos rested a notebook against the fence
nearby and began writing in it.

Sebastian bought a handful of lettuce and held
the bunch over the railing.

His brother muttered, “Hmm,” then buried
himself in his notebook again.

He briefly stroked the velvet nose and then
turned toward Carlos, who was busily marking
in his notebook.

When they came to the giraffe feeding station,
Sebastian was certain Carlos would pay better
attention.

“Why do I even care?” Sebastian thought. “It
doesn’t hurt me if he wastes this entire trip
because he’s got his nose in a notebook.”

“Sorry, little buddy. You were paying attention
to the animals, just not in the way I was. I’m
glad we’ll have these drawings of our visit.

Sebastian ached to scream, “Put that down
and pay attention to the animals!”

Sebastian shook his head. Why would anyone
come to a zoo if not to see the animals?

Relevant Details

I know this detail is

irrelevant to the
prompt because…

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Prompt: Explain how Sebastian's attitude towards
Carlos changes throughout their zoo visit.

Irrelevant Details

Carlos rested a notebook against the fence
nearby and began writing in it.

Sebastian shook his head. Why would anyone
come to a zoo if not to see the animals?

Relevant Details

I know this detail is

relevant to the

prompt because…

Multiple Choice

Read the sentence from the text.

Carlos smiled and jumped up to take his place at the feeding station while Sebastian readied his cell phone.

This piece of evidence is ... to the help answer the prompt.

• important

• relevant

• interesting

• irrelevant

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Sebastian’
s attitude
towards
Carlos
changes

Which relevant details are you going to write use? Write them in these four bubbles.

Prompt: Explain how Sebastian's attitude towards
Carlos changes throughout their zoo visit.

Multiple Choice

Prompt: Explain how Sebastian's attitude towards
Carlos changes throughout their zoo visit.

Which of the following details from the text is relevant to the prompt?

• A. Just this morning, she was licking her paws and washing her face like the tiger is doing. (paragraph 4)

• A. Sebastian kept encouraging Carlos to pay attention to the wildlife, but with little success. (paragraph 7)

• A. He briefly stroked the velvet nose and then turned toward Carlos, who was busily marking in his notebook.. (paragraph 10)

• A.  Sebastian handed back the notebook, somewhat ashamed. (paragraph 12)

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Read the prompt and underline key words

Identify relevant details from the text

Organize your ideas into a simple outline

Prepare to begin writing introduction and
conclusion

Read the entire text carefully

What are the steps for planning an

ECR?

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Closing

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DOL: Given a fiction
text, students will
correctly use text
evidence to plan a
first draft in at least
4 of 5 questions.

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Demonstration of Learning

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Which of the following sentences from the text is relevant to the prompt?

A. The Indiana Jones Bridge was 60 feet in the air and made up of tiny boards

to step on—but with large spaces between them. (paragraph 4)

B. I had already seen two people go across the bridge without much trouble, so

I was sure that I could make it across easily. (paragraph 5)

C. The wooden pole I was climbing swung back and forth, which was fairly

scary, and my courage started to fail me a little. (paragraph 6)

D. I took in the scenic view of softly fluttering leaves and golden sunlight peeking

through the thick, straight-backed trees. (paragraph 6)

Read the following prompt. Then answer the questions
that follow.
Explain how the narrator’s feelings on the Indiana Jones
Bridge changes throughout the story.

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