Revising Lesson and Practice

Revising
How to make your writing go from "meh" to "AMAZING!"

What is revising?

Revising is when you change the STRUCTURE of a sentence to make sure it is CLEAR and DETAILED. You do not want your sentences to have UNNECESSARY information. You also do not want the main idea of your sentences to be CONFUSING to the reader. When you REVISE you make CHANGES to your sentences to help with this!

How do I start revising?

"Having changed over time, there are still more changes to utensils to meet modern needs."

Verb: Changed, changes
Verb tense: past, future

2. Identify the VERB of the sentence and the VERB TENSE (What is the subject doing? Are they doing it in the past present or future?)

"Having changed over time, there are still more changes to utensils to meet modern needs."

Subject: Utensils

1. Identify the SUBJECT of the sentence (Who or what is the sentence talking about?)

How do I start revising?

Original Sentence: "Having changed over time, there are still more changes to utensils to meet modern needs."

Revised Sentence: Utensils have changed over time and are still changing to meet modern needs.

4. REWRITE the sentence with a clear subject, verb and verb tense.

"Having changed over time, there are still more changes to utensils to meet modern needs."

Unnecessary Words: More

3. DELETE any unnecessary words. (Are there any extra prepositions, adjectives or general words?)

Multiple Choice

What is the SUBJECT of this sentence?

"For example, knives were permitted only if they were safer so their points were ground down."

• Example

• Safer

• Points

• Knives

Multiple Choice

What is the VERB and VERB TENSE of this sentence?

"For example, knives were permitted only if they were safer so their points were ground down."

(Hint: add "-ing" to the end of the word you think is the verb. If it makes sense you're right!)

• They (Future tense)

• Safer (Present tense)

• Ground (Past tense)

• Down (Present tense)

Multiple Choice

Are there any unnecessary words that could be DELETED from the sentence?

"For example, knives were permitted only if they were safer so their points were ground down."

(Hint: Think about the main idea of this sentence. Which words have to stay?)

• Knives

• Ground

• Safer

• No words need to be deleted.

Open Ended

How is the revised sentence better than the original?

Original: "For example, knives were permitted only if they were safer so their points were ground down."

Revised: "For example, knives were permitted only if their points were ground down so that they were safer."

Labelling

Label the SUBJECT, VERB and VERB TENSE of the sentence?

"Other lizards and also insects and snakes and scorpions were found in the goanna burrows."

Drag labels to their correct position on the image

Lizards, insects, snakes and scorpions

Past

Present

Future

Found

Open Ended

What are some unnecessary words that can be DELETED from this sentence?

"Other lizards and also insects and snakes and scorpions were found in the goanna burrows."

Multiple Choice

What is the best way to REVISE the following sentence?

"Other lizards and also insects and snakes and scorpions were found in the goanna burrows."

• Other lizards were found in the goanna burrows and also insects, snakes, and scorpions were in the burrows.

• Other lizards were found in the goanna burrows, including insects, snakes and scorpions.

• Others were found, including lizards, insects, and snakes, and in the goanna burrows with scorpions.

• Other lizards, insects, snakes and scorpions were found in the goanna burrows.

Open Ended

How is the REVISED sentence better than the original?

Original: Other lizards and also insects and snakes and scorpions were found in the goanna burrows.

Revised: Other lizards, insects, snakes and scorpions were found in the goanna burrows.