Revising Introductions & Conclusions

Revise sentences to have a more clear introduction & closing

By Erin De Luna

What is this article going to be about? Where is the controlling idea usually found?

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Read the background information and title, and introduction.

Read the article and determine what the entire text is about.

Open Ended

What is the controlling idea of The Yellow-Spotted Goanna?

The last sentence of the introduction should state the controlling idea of the text. Does sentence 8 state the controlling idea?

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Controlling Idea

Multiple Choice

Which of these can replace sentence 8 to express a more effective controlling idea for this paper?

• It's the deepest known nest of any vertebrate, the nest of the yellow-spotted goanna.

• Around the world, scientists are discovering new nests like these that amaze them.

• This next could be a remarkable new discovery, but first they must investigate further.

• They were curious as they had been looking for a particular nest for a very long time.

Closing

When you are asked to improve a closing, it is typically missing the controlling idea.

Read the article, My Treasures.

What is the controlling idea of the article?

Multiple Choice

Which sentence should replace sentence 32 to bring this story to a more effective close?

• So I encourage everyone to start a collection of rocks like I have.

• The rocks represent my story, which makes my collection priceless.

• It doesn't matter what people collect, as long as they enjoy doing it.

• Treasures are important regardless of what they are actually worth.

Read the article, The Gratitude Challenege.

Multiple Choice

Which sentence can be added after sentence 29 to bring this story to a more effective closing?

• Truthfully, that is just what I needed this time.

• Thinking about gratitude helped to change my attitude.

• Finding a new activity is a great idea for everyone.

• I am really glad I have a teacher in my leadership class.