Writing SOL Review Composing & Revising Questions Pt 2

Multiple Choice

How can Keisha best rewrite the sentence to make it clearer without changing the meaning?

• A. Joseph Banks saw on his voyage one of the plants that impressed him, it was the breadfruit tree.

• B. On his voyage, Joseph Banks saw the breadfruit tree that impressed him - a plant.

• Seen by Joseph Banks on his voyage and impressing him was one of the plants he saw, the breadfruit tree.

• D. Joseph Banks was impressed with the breadfruit tree, one of the plants he saw on his voyage.

Multiple Choice

How can Danny best rewrite the sentence?

• F. Every part that wasn't covered with rain gear of me was within minutes soaking wet.

• G. Every part that wasn't covered with rain gear of me was soaking wet within minutes.

• H. Soaking wet, within minutes was every part of me that wasn't covered with rain gear.

• J. Within minutes, every part of me that wasn't covered with rain gear was soaking wet.

Multiple Choice

How can the sentence best be rewritten?

• F. He had artistic talent and covered his dorm walls with his sketches.

• G. His dorm walls, he had artistic talent and were covered with his sketches.

• H. His sketches were covering his dorm walls, he also had artistic talent.

• J. He had artistic talent his sketches covered his dorm walls.

Multiple Choice

Which sentence needs to be revised for appropriate tone?

• Sentence 4

• Sentence 5

• Sentence 9

• Sentence 11

Multiple Choice

In this sentence, which word should replace get to be most specific?

• cause

• bring

• assure

• persuade

• change

Multiple Choice

How can Tricia best revise this sentence for appropriate tone?

• Lots of Sarabande students have felt her super school spirit and personal support when she would check out sporting events to cheer us on.

• Each year more and more students have felt her fabulous school spirit and support as the sweated it out at sporting events or games.

• Tons of Sarabande students from past years have felt her school spirit and personal support as she heaped on the encouragement during a sporting competition or game.

• Generations of Sarabande students have felt her school spirit and personal support as she inspired us to do our best during a sporting event or game.

Multiple Choice

In this sentence, which word best replaces put to make the meaning precise?

• turned

• adapted

• arranged

• translated

• developed

Multiple Choice

How can Julius best revise sentence 7 for appropriate tone?

• The feast could easily be held on a weeknight at school.

• You have to let us hold the feast on a weeknight at school.

• It would be so awesome if we could hold the feast on a weeknight at school!

• What do you think about maybe holding the feast on a weeknight at school?

Multiple Choice

Which word would best replace gave in sentence 13 to make the meaning more precise?

• showed

• offered

• brought

• introduced

Multiple Choice

Which is the best way to revise sentence 5 for clarity?

• Furthermore, I believe for the band this ideas to attend the state spring competitions could potentially generate enough money.

• Furthermore, I believe this idea could potentially generate enough money for the band to attend the state spring competitions.

• Furthermore, to attend the state spring competitions for the band, this idea could, I believe, potentially generate enough money.

• Furthermore, for the band, I believe that this idea to attend the state competitions could potentially generate enough money.

Multiple Choice

How is this sentence best revised for conciseness?

• Although I cannot name the cave because the owner of the farm restricts access to keep it pure, it appears to be no more than a large hold in the ground.

• To keep the cave undisturbed, the owner of the farm restricts access and I cannot name the cave, but I can say that it appears to be no more than a large hole in the ground.

• Although I cannot name the cave because the owner of the farm restricts access to keep is as undisturbed as possible, it appears no larger than a hold in the ground is what I can say.

• I can say that the cave, although I cannot name the cave because the owner of the farm restricts access to keep it pure, appears to be no more than a large hole in the ground.