Editing practice #1

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   There is one sport that is missing from the Olympic line up:  video games.

Write a clear thesis statement for this persuasive essay.

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Serious video gamers spend hours learning strategies of how to play and win.  This is similar to athletes who study the strategies of their sport.

Add a compound sentence at the end of the paragraph.

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     Videos games aren’t taken seriously.  My dad thinks it’s a waste of time.  People may think it’s just a game, but can’t we say the same thing about basketball or volleyball?  Video games require a high level of skill from the player.

What detail should be eliminated?

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Video games provide valuable hand-eye coordination practice.  Kids and adults can practice this skill by playing fast-paced games.  Video games are also fun for the whole family; they bring families together.

The writer is having trouble distinguishing between fact and opinion. Your mission:  Identify the opinion and the facts in the paragraph.

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      In order for the sport of videos games to be an Olympic game, the public needs to realize it’s a serious sport.  Video games require the same degree of dedication, practice, and strategy as other sports.

Revise or add a sentence using a semicolon.