Editing Review

Revise and Editing Review-11/9

​1 My brother, Brian, likes to always annoy me. 2 Yesterday, he took my lunch box. 3 I asked him to give it back.

​What change can be made to improve the clarity of sentence 3?

A.change I to me

B.delete yesterday,

C.change him to my brother

D no revision is needed in this sentence

​What change can be made to improve the clarity of sentence 3?

A.change I to me

B.delete yesterday,

C.change him to my brother

D no revision is needed in this sentence

​1 Last weekend, my family and I decided to go to Six Flags. 2 It was my first time ever to ride a roller coaster. 3 I was a little nervous to ride the tallest roller coaster. 4 My sister said it was so fun. 5 My mom could tell I was too scared. 6 She said I didn’t have to ride the roller coaster. 7 I decided to be brave and give it a try.

​What sentence could be added after sentence 7 to add clarity to the paragraph?

A I like to try new things.

B I was secretly still scared.

C I am so glad I decided to try the roller coaster

​What sentence could be added after sentence 7 to add clarity to the paragraph?

A I like to try new things.

B I was secretly still scared.

C I am so glad I decided to try the roller coaster

​1 We went to the beach with my family. 2 There were a lot of birds flying around looking for food. 3 We noticed the seagulls eyeing our food. 4 They were getting really close to our area. 5 The seagulls flew over my head. 6The seagulls landed on the roof of our umbrella.

​What is the best way to combine sentences 5 and 6?

A. The seagulls flew. Over my head and landed on the roof of our umbrella.

B The seagulls flew and landed, over my head because the roof of our umbrella.

C The seagulls flew over my head and landed on the roof of our umbrella.

​What is the best way to combine sentences 5 and 6?

A. The seagulls flew. Over my head and landed on the roof of our umbrella.

B The seagulls flew and landed, over my head because the roof of our umbrella.

C The seagulls flew over my head and landed on the roof of our umbrella.

​1 The little kitten loved to play. 2 He would roll from side to side in his belly. 3 Mama cat had to keep a close eye on him, so he wouldn’t roll away.

​What change, if any, should be made to sentence 2?

A Change He to Him

B Change in to on

C Delete the word would

​What change, if any, should be made to sentence 2?

A Change He to Him

B Change in to on

C Delete the word would

​1 Reid lives next door to his friend Carson. 2 They both have tree houses in their backyards. 3 Carson’s treehouse is biggest than Reids. 4 Both treehouses have a rope swing.

What change, if any, should be made to sentence 3?

A Change Carson’s to Carsons

B Change than to then

C Change biggest to bigger​

​What change, if any, should be made to sentence 3?

A Change Carson’s to Carsons

B Change than to then

C Change biggest to bigger