Editing and Revising Practice

Revising & Editing

STAAR Review

Revising Practice

Read the passage on the next slide and answer the questions that follow.

Multiple Choice

The meaning of sentence 4 is unclear. Byron can improve the clarity of this sentence by changing it to —

• the famous Trojans

• the magnificent city

• the extreme wealth

• the historical record

Multiple Choice

Byron would like to add a sentence to the end of the first paragraph (sentences 1–5) to help transition into the ideas in the second paragraph (sentences 6–9). Which sentence can be added after sentence 5 to help accomplish this goal?

• It was difficult to say whether the ancient city was real or had just been a figment of someone’s imagination.

• But one day, as so often happens, everything changed, and it changed rapidly and excitingly and permanently.

• Because no one could definitively prove that it had ever existed, people had trouble believing that it actually had.

• Aside from the historical references mentioned above, Thonis-Heracleion was essentially forgotten—that is, until recently.

Multiple Choice

3 Byron has offered a weak thesis for his paper. Which of the following could replace sentence 9 and provide a more effective thesis statement for this paper?

• Before long they realized that they had found the city of Thonis-Heracleion.

• In time they realized that they had actually found what was a very ancient city.

• At first no one knew exactly what had been discovered, but there was plenty of curiosity.

• In the end it just happened to be the place and the city of Thonis-Heracleion.

Editing Practice

Read the passage on the next slide and answer the questions that follow.

Multiple Choice

What is the correct way to write sentence 4?

• As I watched friends find dates for homecoming, I was initially a little discouraged. Because it looked as though my first homecoming dance would be missing a key character.

• As I watched friends find dates for homecoming, I was initially a little discouraged. It looked as though my first homecoming dance would be missing a key character.

• As I watched friends find dates for homecoming. I was initially a little discouraged because it looked as though my first homecoming dance would be missing a key character.

• Sentence 4 is written correctly

Multiple Choice

What change, if any, should be made in sentence 7?

• Change that to something

• Change situation to sitaution

• Change High School to high school

• Make no change

Multiple Choice

What change should be made in sentence 8?

• Change me to I

• Insert a comma after together

• Change decided to decide

• No change should be made.