Revising and Editing Paragraphs

REVISE & EDIT REVIEW

Multiple Choice

What is the purpose of revising and editing in writing?

• To make the writing longer and more confusing

• To add irrelevant information and distract the reader

• To improve the clarity, coherence, and overall quality of the content.

• To decrease the overall quality and coherence of the content

Multiple Choice

Revising is:

• Fixing grammar, punctuation and sentence structure

• Adding, cutting, moving or changing information to improve content

• Having a peer read your paper

Multiple Choice

Editing is:

• Fixing grammar, punctuation and sentence structure

• Adding, cutting, moving or changing information to improve content

• Having a peer read your paper

Multiple Choice

What is the mnemonic device to help you revise a piece of writing?

• LEGS

• CUPS

• ARMS

• BOWL

Multiple Choice

When editing a piece of text which mnemonic device should you use?

• CUPS
• ARMS

• LEGS

• BOWL

Multiple Choice

What role does grammar and punctuation play in the revising and editing process?

• They have no impact on the quality of writing

• Grammar and punctuation are only important for spoken language, not written

• They help to improve the overall quality and effectiveness of the writing.

• Revising and editing can be done effectively without considering grammar and punctuation

Multiple Select

Select all correct choices.

When looking at a revising questions, which of the following are obvious giveaways that the answer choice is INCORRECT?

• The answer choice sounds awkward.

• The answer choice has repeated words or phrases.

• The answer choice has a run-on sentence.

• The answer choice contains no errors.

Multiple Choice

What are some common mistakes to look out for when revising and editing a piece of writing?

• Grammar and punctuation errors, unclear or awkward phrasing, repetition, and lack of coherence

• Including too much dialogue and commas

• Using too many descriptive action words

• Only spelling mistakes and typos

Transition Words

These link sentences and ideas. If you use them correctly, your writing will be easier to understand and more mature. Choose the best transition word to insert into the following sentences.

Multiple Choice

I was concentrating on my homework. ________, the soup boiled over.

• However

• For example

• Meanwhile

• Furthermore

Multiple Choice

When you begin an exercise program, you must be careful not to overdo it. My father, _________, hurt his back by exercising too hard without warming up first.

• However

• Therefore

• For example

• Meanwhile

Multiple Choice

Select the best sentence from the choices below.

• Texting while driving is dangerous; however, it is also illegal.

• Texting while driving is dangerous; furthermore, it is also illegal.

• Texting while driving is dangerous; for example, it is also illegal.

• Texting while driving is dangerous; meanwhile, it is also illegal.

Topic Sentences

• The first sentence of each body paragraph

• Introduces the main idea of the paragraph

• Concise and to the point

• NOT a thesis statement

• Should directly refer to reasoning found in your thesis

• Supporting details (evidence and analysis) build off of the topic sentence

Multiple Choice

What does the topic sentence of a paragraph tell you?

• How many sentences the paragraph has

• A supporting detail about the topic

• The main idea of a paragraph

• A summary of the supporting details

Multiple Choice

What is the best topic sentence for the paragraph below?
____________________. First of all, we need money to repair old roads and build new roads. We also need more to pay teachers’ salaries and to pay for services such as trash collection. Finally, more tax money is needed to give financial help to the poor citizens of the city. It is clear that the city will have serious problems if taxes are not raised soon.

• We should raise city taxes.

• City taxes are too high.

• City taxes pay for new roads.

Multiple Choice

What is the best topic sentence for the paragraph below?
____________________. For example, a person can have breakfast in New York, board an airplane, and have dinner in Paris. A businesswoman in London can instantly place an order with a factory in Hong Kong by sending a fax. Furthermore, a schoolboy in Tokyo can turn on a TV and watch a baseball game being played in Los Angeles.

• Airplanes have changed our lives.

• Advances in technology have made the world seem smaller.

• The fax machine was an important invention.

Multiple Select

Choose TWO supporting sentences for this topic sentence:

Young children should not be allowed to cross Fourth Avenue by themselves.

• There are many good restaurants on that street.

• Last year, two children were injured crossing that street.

• Cars are always speeding on that avenue.

• There is a school located on Fourth Avenue.

Main Idea

• Determine what the topic of the paragraph

• The topic is usually repeated multiple times

• Read to find any details related to that topic once you have read the passage

How to Identify

• The main point the author is making

• Supported by details in the text

• All information in the paragraph should connect to the main idea

• Some information is unimportant

Definition

Multiple Choice

What is the main idea of the paragraph below?
When one hears the term "reality" applied to a show, one might expect that the events portrayed occurred naturally or, at the least, were not scripted. This is not always the case. Many reality shows occur in unreal environments, like rented mansions occupied by film crews. Such living environments do not reflect what most people understand to be "reality." Worse, there have been accusations that events not captured on film were later restaged by producers. Worse still, some involved in the production of "reality" television claim that the participants were urged to act out story lines premeditated by producers. With such accusations floating around, it's no wonder many people take reality TV to be about as real as the sitcom.

• Reality TV is definitely real.

• Reality TV isn't always real.

• Reality TV shows are like sitcoms.

• Reality TV makes everyone a star.

PRACTICE

Multiple Choice

What is the MOST effective revision to make in sentence 3?

• A My curiosity intensified the sheer size of the vessel spellbound me.
• B The sheer size of the vessel and my curiosity intensified, spellbound me.
• C The sheer size of the vessel spellbound me, and my curiosity intensified.

Multiple Choice

What is the MOST effective way to revise sentence 5?

• A The wind coursed through my hair, as though I were soaring, as I felt buoyant.
• B The wind coursed through my hair and as I felt buoyant, I also felt as though I were soaring.
• C As though I were soaring, I felt buoyant the wind coursed through my hair.
• D No change is needed.

Multiple Choice

What is the MOST effective way to revise sentence 3?

• A In those times, proper etiquette was highly valued mainly during meals.
• B In those times, proper etiquette during meals was highly valued.
• C In those times, it was highly valued proper etiquette during meals.

Multiple Choice

Fay wants to use a more appropriate transition in sentence 7. Select the phrase that should replace So now you know sleep is important in this sentence:
___________________ , not only will it improve their grades, but it will also make them feel better overall.

• Placing sleep as a priority
• If students prioritize getting enough sleep
• It is up to students to make the decision
• In closing, sleep is important