Revising Writing

Writing Class Revising

Revision part 2

Moby Max Revising Part 2

Today, we are going to work on how to make our personal narrative even better!

Formatting Dialogue

• Use quotation marks

• All punctuation goes inside the quotation marks.

• Indent when a new speaker speaks.

Multiple Choice

Where do punctuation marks go in dialogue?

• Outside of the quotation marks.

• Inside of the quotation marks.

On your narrative you need to add more dialogue

• Underline two spots where you can add in dialogue

• Make sure each speaker has at least two lines per conservation.

Transitions

First, then, next, last are just a few of the possible choices

Why do we use Transitions?

One reason is that they help your reader understand the passage of time in your narrative.

There are many other reasons too!

Multiple Select

Which of these are transition words?

• next

• no

• first

• hope

Revise your Narrative

• Reread your narrative.

• Add transition words and phrases to show changes in time.

Vary your sentence beginnings

Why?

What you need to do

• Reread your narrative

• underline all repeated words

• use a thesaurus or internet search to find similar but different words (synonyms)

• revise your narrative

Multiple Choice

What can I use help make my sentences more varied?

• Mom

• Teacher

• Thesaurus

• ceiling

Check for strong verbs

A verb is an action word

Some are weak verbs and should be changed.

Strong Verbs

Use specific strong verbs instead of weak verbs that will help your writing become clearer.

Strong Verb examples

Try using some of these strong verbs in your narrative if they fit your story. You can also find some on the internet if these don't fit.

Multiple Select

Choose ALL the strong verbs from these choices:

• chase

• is

• attack

• got

• shiver

What you need to do

• underline the weak verbs in your narrative

• Use a thesaurus to revise

• Use strong verbs!

Here are some more strong verbs!

Use these strong verbs in your narrative writing.

Your Homework-Revising part 2

• Complete the Moby Max assignment

• Revise your Personal Narrative on paper or the Google document as you complete the lessons

• Do these things and turn in by next Wednesday

• add more dialogue, add transition words

• Vary your sentence beginnings

• Use strong verbs