Revising Practice

Revising Practice

By Ryann Hardwick

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Question 1:

What is the best way to combine sentences 2 and 3?

A. Tyler Belvins, a 26-year-old from Illinois, has done just that by becoming a streamer on the video platform Twitch.

B. Tyler Belvins is a 26-year-old from Illinois, he has done just that be becoming a streamer on the video platform Twitch.

C. Twitch is a video platform where Tyler Belvins from Illinois who is a 26-year-old is a streamer.

D. A 26-year-old from Illinois is a streamer on the video platform Twitch his name is Tyler Belvins.

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​QUESTION 2:

What is the BEST revision to make in sentence 5?

A. You may know him better by the username Ninja, the owner of Twitch’s most-followed channel with over 4 million subscribers.

B. You may know him better by the username Ninja: he is the owner of Twitch’s most-followed channel with over 4 million subscribers.

C. The owner of Twitch’s most-followed channel has over 4 million subscribers, and has the username of Ninja.

D. No revision needed

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​QUESTION 3:

The author would like to add the following detail to the paragraph. Where is the best place to insert this sentence?

Keep plugging into your favorite video game and focus on business subjects in school such as math and English.

A. Before sentence 5

B. After sentence 6

C. Before sentence 8

D. After sentence 10

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​QUESTION 4:

Judson has included a sentence that does not belong in the first paragraph

(1-6). Which sentence should he remove from this paragraph?

A. Sentence 2

B. Sentence 3

C. Sentence 4

D. Sentence 5

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​QUESTION 5:

Judson has not used the most effective transition at the beginning of sentence 14. Which phrase should replace In the meantime in this sentence?

A. In the end

B. Without a doubt

C. In addition

D. So far

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​QUESTION 6:

Which sentence should replace sentence 32 to bring this story to a more effective close?

A. So I encourage everyone to start a collection of rocks like I have.

B. The rocks represent my story, which makes my collection priceless.

C. It doesn't matter what people collect, as long as they enjoy doing it.

D. Treasure are important regardless of what they are actually worth.

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​QUESTION 7:

Which sentence should replace sentence 6 to express and more effective conclusion to this story?

F. Without a doubt, the Boston Tea Party led to the American Revolution and helped create the United States as we know it today.

G. The Boston Tea Party was an important part of history, and it made the colonists want to fight.

H. Because of the Boston Tea Party, the colonists gained independence from Britain.

J. The Boston Tea Party changed everything for the colonists because they fought for freedom.

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​QUESTION 8:

What transition word could be added at the beginning of sentence 5 to improve the flow?

F. Then

G. However

H. Eventually

J. Because

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​QUESTION 9:

What is the BEST way to revise sentence 4 to avoid repeating ideas?

A. The British decided to punish the colonist because of their anger by closing the harbor and making new laws.

B. The British, because they were angry, decided to punish the colonists by closing the harbor and making new laws as a result of their anger.

C. The British punished the colonists.

D. The British were furious and decided to punish the colonists by closing the harbor and making new laws.

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​QUESTION 10:

The first paragraph (sentences 1-7) contains an extraneous sentence. Which sentence should be removed?

A. Sentence 1

B. Sentence 4

C. Sentence 3

D. Sentence 6

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​QUESTION 11:

What is the best way to combine sentences 4 and 5?

A. One of the most famous conductors was Harriet Tubman, who made 13 missions to rescue more than 70 people, and the journey was dangerous because they had to travel at night to avoid being caught.

B. One of the most famous conductors was Harriet Tubman, and she made 13 missions to rescue more than 70 people. The journey was dangerous because they had to travel at night to avoid being caught.

C. Harriet Tubman, one of the most famous conductors, made 13 missions to rescue more than 70 people, and the journey was dangerous because they had to travel at night to avoid being caught.

D. Harriet Tubman was one of the most famous conductors and made 13 missions to rescue more than 70 people, and the journey was dangerous because they traveled at night.

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​QUESTION 12:

Which transition phrase should be added to the beginning of sentence 6 to add clarity?

A. Despite the risks,

B. Finally,

C. Since,

D. Throughout,

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