UNIT 2.3 THE ART OF POETRY PART 2

The Art of Poetry Revision 2.3 ( 2)
Unit Focus: Students learn the process of revising poetry—how poets make thoughtful changes to improve meaning, tone, and clarity. They explore how adding, deleting, or keeping words affects the poem’s overall message and emotional impact.

By Erica Buena Obra

By Erica Buena Obra

Standard	Meaning in Student Language	Why these go together
​RL.9-10.4	​I can analyze how an author’s word choices create meaning and tone in a poem.	​To revise my poem, I need to see which words make the poem sad, happy, strong, or weak.
​W.9-10.9	I can improve my writing by using the revision process the adding, deleting, or rewriting to make my ideas clearer and stronger.	​When I revise my poem, I can explain why I added, removed, or kept a word to make the poem clearer or stronger.
​L.9-10.5	​I can understand what words mean and how changing them changes the poem’s meaning.	​Choosing the right words helps my poem show the exact feeling or idea I want readers to feel.

​Standards / Skills Table

By Erica Buena Obra

​Learning Targets

• I can explain what revision means.

• I can trace the development of a poem through several draft

• Understand that the revision process removes roadblocks to understanding the meaning of a piece of writing.

DO NOW

By Erica Buena Obra

Open Ended

“Why do you think writers revise their poems or stories? Write one reason.”

Open Ended

What does the word revision mean to you? Write one sentence to explain.

Multiple Choice

Original Line:

“The morning sky was quiet.

Revised Line:

“The morning sky was strangely quiet.

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Which word was added in the revised line?

• morning

• was

• strangely

• quiet

Multiple Choice

Original Line:

“The morning sky was quiet.

Revised Line:

“The morning sky was strangely quiet.

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What effect does the added word have on the meaning?

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• It makes the sentence shorter.

• It makes the quiet sky sound more unusual or eerie.

• it makes the line confusing.

• It removes emotion.

Multiple Choice

Original Line:

“Birds sang softly outside my window.”

Revised Line:

“Birds sang outside my window.”

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Which word was removed from the revised line?

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• birds

• softly

• window

• outside

M – Sit with your group and complete the work together.

V – Voice Level 1

P – Read the essay “From Lottery” quietly, pausing after each paragraph to highlight or underline important or interesting words and then answer the “Making Observations” questions by returning to the text.

T – 15 minutes.

• _{Read the essay “from Lottery” quietly.}

• _{Stop after each paragraph and highlight or underline words that feel important or interesting.}

• _{Answer the “Making Observations” questions and returning to the text.}

Activity 1 - SPRINGBOARD

Let’s Discuss Your Answers

10 - minutes

Open Ended

1. Why do poets revise their poems? What is the purpose of revision?

Open Ended

1. How does removing or adding a word change the meaning or feeling of a poem? Give one example.

Open Ended

What does Haidri mean when he says revision “removes hindrances” from the poem?

Open Ended

After revising, how should the poem feel different to the reader or writer?

Write : The poem should be _______________________

5 - MINUTE BREAK




AFTER BREAK LETS DO THE EXIT TICKET :)

Multiple Choice

Read the excerpt from the final draft of Rasma Haidri's poem "Lottery.

That’s six and a half million a year for life!

Haidri chose to preserve this line from the second draft, with one revision. 

Which choice best explains the effect of underlining the words for life in the final draft?

Responses

• It makes the phrase grammatically correct.

• It provides a stronger poetic effect.

• It conveys the character's emotions.

• It connects the phrase to the title.

Multiple Choice

Draft 2 
Everything you would need
the week of my vacation
could be found at Woodman's:

Final Draft 
Everything my mother needs
can be found at Woodman's:

Which statement best describes the effect of the revision from "Draft 2" to "Final Draft"?

• The poem shows the character more clearly and helps us understand them better.

• The poem becomes a more subjective memory.

• The poem becomes a more scientific investigation. 

• The poem becomes a more disturbing interpretation.

Multiple Choice

Which statement best describes how removing some information between the journal entry phase and the final draft helped to clarify Haidri's poem?

• Haidri removed descriptive details to make the subject of the poem explicit.

• Haidri removed nonessential details because they distract from the meaning of the poem.

• Haidri removed information so she could change long lines to short lines to make her poem easier to read.

• Haidri removed some of the essential ideas and set them in a different order to make the poem more focused and logical.

Open Ended

Poets use this when they cut extra words to make the poem clearer

LETS DO THE REVISION BINGGO

• Listen Carefully: I will read a clue or definition for a word.

• Find and Cover: Look at your card and cover the word that matches the clue. You can use a marker, token, or paper piece.

• Check Rows: Try to cover 4 words in a row horizontally, vertically, or diagonally.

• Call “REVISION!”: When you have 4 in a row, shout “REVISION!”

• Verify: I will check your card to make sure your words match the clues.

• Keep Playing: You can continue to play for more winners or try to cover the whole card for a full Bingo.

Appreciating the Author's Craft
SPRINGBOARD

M – Sit with your group and complete the work together.

V – Voice Level 1

P – Read the essay “From Lottery” quietly, pausing after each paragraph to highlight or underline important or interesting words and then answer the “Making Observations” questions by returning to the text.

T – 15 minutes.

​Discuss the questions that can be found in your springboard. with your classmates. Go your springboard Unit 2.3 the Art of Poetry and answer the Appreciating the Authors Craft.

Check Your Understanding

SHARING THE ANSWERS.