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Multiple Choice

Sentence 5 contains repeated information. What is the BEST way to revise this sentence?

(4) Jamie's heart raced with excitement and he thought about where the tree was located. (5) He was so excited and he wondered where the tree was and what could be buried beneath it.

• He wondered what might be buried beneath the tree.

• He was excited as he thought about where the tree was and what could be hidden there.

• His heart raced as he imagined where the tree was and what was underneath it.

• He could hardly contain his excitement while thinking about the tree and what it might be hiding.

Multiple Choice

What revision should be made in sentence 6?

(6) Jamie ran the map to show his grandpa who was downstairs. 

• Jamie ran the map to his grandpa downstairs who was.

• Jamie running downstairs, grandpa the map to show.

• Jamie downstairs ran the map show to grandpa.

• Jamie ran downstairs to show his grandpa the map.

Multiple Choice

What is the BEST way to combine sentences 7 and 8?

• Grandpa said he smiled, "That tree is in the town park," Jamie dashed and grabbed his raincoat outside.

• Grandpa smiled and said, "That tree is in the town park," and Jamie grabbed his raincoat and dashed outside.

• "That tree is in the town park," Jamie grabbed, his raincoat, dashing outside.

• Grandpa and Jamie smiled and said, "That tree is in the town park" and grabbed his raincoat and dashed outside.

Open Ended

Rewrite sentence 9 in a clear and effective way, avoiding repetition.

(9) The wind whistled through the trees as he reached the park, as he was gripping the map tightly. 

Multiple Choice

Jamie has not used the BEST choice of words in sentence 10. Which phrase should replace way too hard in this sentence?

(10) Once there, he realized the map was way too hard to read than he expected.

• more harder

• not even hard

• harder

• more easy

Multiple Choice

Combine the ideas in sentences 11 and 12 to create one clear and effective sentence.

(11) He flipped it upside down, then sideways. (12) He flipped it trying to make sense of the faded lines.

• He flipped it upside down, then sideways, trying to make sense of the faded lines.

• He flipped it sideways, then upside down, trying to make sense of the faded lines.

• He flipped it down, then sideways, trying to make sense of the faded lines.

• He flipped it trying to make sense of the faded lines.

Multiple Choice

What is the BEST way to revise sentence 13?

(13) Something clicked he recognized a familiar rock drawn on the map.

• Something clicked, so he recognized a familiar rock drawn on the map.

• Something clicked, and he recognized a familiar rock drawn on the map.

• Something clicked but he recognized a familiar rock drawn on the map.

• Something clicked, nor he recognized a familiar rock that was drawn on the map.

Multiple Choice

Which transition is best to add to the beginning of sentence 16?

(16) Jamie noticed something sticking out of the ground behind the rock.

• However

• After all

• Therefore

• Soon

Multiple Choice

Jamie needs to add a topic sentence for the third paragraph (sentences 17–23). Which sentence should be added just before sentence 17 as the topic sentence for this paragraph?

(17) His fingers brushed against cool glass. (18) It was a small bottle with a rolled-up note inside! (19) Carefully, he pulled out the paper, but it was too faded to read. (20) Disappointed but determined, he sprinted back home. (21) Grandpa held the paper up to the sunlight, and slowly, the letters became clearer. (22) It was a riddle, a clue leading to another hidden treasure! (23) He suddenly remembered that he forgot to feed his dog that morning.

• Jamie had no idea what he would find near the rock.

• The park was filled with trees, rocks, and hidden surprises.

• Jamie hoped the map would lead him to something valuable.

• The sun was beginning to set as Jamie kept searching.

Multiple Choice

Which change can be made to improve the clarity of sentence 19?

• Change pulled to pulling

• Change paper to thing

• Change it to the writing

• No revision is needed in this sentence.

Multiple Choice

Jamie would like to add a sentence to bring the paragraph to a more effective conclusion. Which sentence should be added after sentence 22 to help achieve this goal?

• The bottle had been hidden for many years.

• He couldn’t wait to solve the mystery and find the next clue.

• Grandpa had always loved riddles, and he smiled at the challenge.

• The treasure was probably buried deep underground.

Multiple Choice

Jamie has included an extraneous sentence in the third paragraph (sentences 17–24). Which sentence should be deleted from this paragraph?

• Sentence 20

• Sentence 21

• Sentence 22

• Sentence 24