EOC Practice - Writing Selection #2

Julio did not write an effective thesis for this paper He would like to delete sentences 4 and 5 and replace them with two sentences that better articulate his thesis. Which of the following should he use?

• Wind turbines aren't anything new. They have been around for a long time.
• People come up with new ideas. And new ideas mean creative solutions for all.
• This wind turbine is unique. It can produce both energy and water.
• A wind turbine may be the perfect answer. Experts believe this is true.

Julio's transition from the second paragraph (sentences 6-13) to the third paragraph (sentences 14-18) is weak. Which of the following could best replace sentence 14 and provide a more effective transition between these two paragraphs?

• It's our job as young people to bring national attention to the crisis.
• We need something to assist with the serious water crisis we are facing.
• Today there are people who are illiterate about this situation
• Many people in the United States are unaware that such a crisis exists.

Which sentence can Julio add after sentence 17 to provide additional support for the ideas presented in the third paragraph (sentences 14-18)?

• I cannot imagine having to spend any portion of my day collecting the water that my family needs to survive.
• Some must travel great distances for water, carrying containers that weigh as much as 40 pounds.
• Women and children are the ones who typically have to bear this responsibility.
• Water has to be found that will meet all the family's needs for drinking, bathing, and cooking.

The meaning of sentence 22 is unclear. What is the most effective way to clarify the meaning of this sentence?

• Change this to it
• Change them to some analysts
• Change water to it
• Change main to primary

What is the most effective way to revise sentence 26?

• It had been over a period of six months, the turbine produced up to 211 gallons of water per day.
• Because it had been over a period of six months, the turbine produced up to 211 gallons of water per day.
• Over a period of six months, the turbine produced up to 211 gallons of water per day.
• The turbine produced up to 211 gallons of water per day, this was over a period of six months.