English II Pre-Ap Revising/Editing

The best way to clarify the meaning of sentence 4 is to change They to —

• The newspapers
• My parents 
• We
• The kids 

Ben realized that he left the following detail out of the second paragraph (sentences 3–9).
I counted them and realized I was holding more than $200 in cash.
Where is the most effective place to insert this sentence?

• after sentence 5
• after sentence 6
• after sentence 7 
• after sentence 8

The transition from the second paragraph (sentences 3–9) to the third paragraph (sentences 10–15) is weak. Read both paragraphs again. Which sentence could best replace sentence 10 and improve the transition between these two paragraphs?

•  Suddenly it was obvious that we all had a lot that we needed to talk about.
• This stranger had given us cash, something our family had been without for a very long time.
• Soon we began talking about what the note had instructed us to do: pay it forward.
• We wanted to think of some unusual ways to help others.

What is the most effective revision to make in sentence 18?

• The kids in the after-school program made cards they were for the residents of a retirement center.
• The kids in the after-school program and the residents of a retirement center made cards.
• The kids in the after-school program made cards for the residents of a retirement center.
• The kids in the after-school program of a retirement center made cards for the residents.

Ben wants to add a closing sentence to reinforce the controlling idea of his paper. Which of the following ideas could best follow sentence 25 and help accomplish this goal?

• You just have to be willing to pay it forward.
• You don’t have to start the fire; you just have to be a spark.
• It doesn’t take money to be a highly effective person.
• Hard work always pays off in the end.