Food in the Future: Revising/Editing

Sacha wants to use figurative language to introduce the setting. What is the most effective way for her to rewrite sentence 1?

• Everyone looked toward the door as the futuristic instructor bolted into the classroom.
• Everyone looked toward the door as the shiny metal instructor teetered into the classroom. 
• The enthusiastic students looked up eagerly as the robot instructor rolled into the classroom.
• The students gazed up like obedient pets as the robot instructor rolled into the classroom.

What is the most effective way to combine sentences 12 and 13 and make the meaning more clear?

• We all laughed and we realized he had to be joking. 
• We all laughed, we knew he was joking. 
• We all laughed because we thought he had to be joking.
• We laughed, of course he was joking.

Tags

CCSS.RI.11-12.5

CCSS.RI.8.3

CCSS.RI.8.5

CCSS.RI.9-10.3

CCSS.RI.9-10.5

What sentence should be added after sentence 17 to support sentence 16 and add to readers' understanding of the futuristic setting?

• My least favorite food is broccoli
• No one touches dirt or steps outside to grow our food.
• Most labs are located inside large factories outside the main city.
• Restaurants purchase their vegetables from labs.

Sacha wants to convey the narrator's feelings about the first step of the experiment.Which of the following sentences would be the most effective following sentence 20?

• I could not believe I was touching real dirt.
• The dirt was a dark, grainy substance.
• I knew what dirt was but never seen it before.
• Some of the dirt spilled on my desk, and I brushed it off.

Tags

CCSS.RI.11-12.3

CCSS.RI.6.3

CCSS.RI.7.3

CCSS.RI.8.3

CCSS.RI.9-10.3

What transition word or phrase could Sacha add to the beginning of sentence 22 to help the reader follow the narrator's actions.

• Next
• Therefore 
• Finally
• In addition to

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CCSS.RI.11-12.10

CCSS.RI.8.10

CCSS.RI.9-10.10

CCSS.RL.8.10

CCSS.RL.9-10.10

Which sentence should be deleted because it does not relate to the story line?

• Sentence 24
• Sentence 25
• Sentence 26
• Sentence 27

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CCSS.RI.11-12.3

CCSS.RI.6.3

CCSS.RI.7.3

CCSS.RI.8.3

CCSS.RI.9-10.3