Editing and Revising

Nate is in the third grade. His class is learning how to write stories. His teacher asked each student to remember a time when he or she did a good thing and to write a story telling about that time. Nate planned his story and wrote his rough draft. Now he needs your help editing and revising it. Here is Nate’s rough draft. Read it and then answer questions 1–10.

(1) Yesterday, on January 15 2009, I felt very good because I did the right thing. (2) I went out to the bus stop to wait for the school bus. (3) It was early in the morning. (4) It felt like the most cold day of the year. (5) I was the first one to get to the bus stop. (6) The other kids got there after a while, and they ask me if I was going to cross the street. (7) I said, “No, we are not supposed to cross the street.” (8) They laughed at me, and then I felt embarrassed. (9) The other kids all walked across the street. (10) That is a dangerous thing to do. (11) It is really dangerous because you could get hit by a car. (12) Because is a very busy street! (13) We are supposed to wait for that our bus to come before we cross the street.

(14) When the bus came, the other kids got on first because I still had to cross the street. (15) I waited for the bus driver’s nod. (16) I felt proud when the bus driver said, “Good job. (17) You waited where you were supposed to wait.” (18) I felt proud because I did sumthing good and I did not let those kids make me change my mind. (19) One time at school I also felt proud because I won an award for attendance.

Choose the correct way to write the underlined part of sentence

1. Yesterday, on January 15 2009, I felt very good because I did the right thing.

• january 15 2009,

• January 15, 2009,

• January, 15, 2009,

• No change is needed.

Nate is in the third grade. His class is learning how to write stories. His teacher asked each student to remember a time when he or she did a good thing and to write a story telling about that time. Nate planned his story and wrote his rough draft. Now he needs your help editing and revising it. Here is Nate’s rough draft. Read it and then answer questions 1–10.

(1) Yesterday, on January 15 2009, I felt very good because I did the right thing. (2) I went out to the bus stop to wait for the school bus. (3) It was early in the morning. (4) It felt like the most cold day of the year. (5) I was the first one to get to the bus stop. (6) The other kids got there after a while, and they ask me if I was going to cross the street. (7) I said, “No, we are not supposed to cross the street.” (8) They laughed at me, and then I felt embarrassed. (9) The other kids all walked across the street. (10) That is a dangerous thing to do. (11) It is really dangerous because you could get hit by a car. (12) Because is a very busy street! (13) We are supposed to wait for that our bus to come before we cross the street.

(14) When the bus came, the other kids got on first because I still had to cross the street. (15) I waited for the bus driver’s nod. (16) I felt proud when the bus driver said, “Good job. (17) You waited where you were supposed to wait.” (18) I felt proud because I did sumthing good and I did not let those kids make me change my mind. (19) One time at school I also felt proud because I won an award for attendance.

Which one of these is not a complete sentence?

• I said, “No, we are not supposed to cross the street.”

• That is a dangerous thing to do.

• Because is a very busy street!

• I waited for the bus driver’s nod.

Nate is in the third grade. His class is learning how to write stories. His teacher asked each student to remember a time when he or she did a good thing and to write a story telling about that time. Nate planned his story and wrote his rough draft. Now he needs your help editing and revising it. Here is Nate’s rough draft. Read it and then answer questions 1–10.

(1) Yesterday, on January 15 2009, I felt very good because I did the right thing. (2) I went out to the bus stop to wait for the school bus. (3) It was early in the morning. (4) It felt like the most cold day of the year. (5) I was the first one to get to the bus stop. (6) The other kids got there after a while, and they ask me if I was going to cross the street. (7) I said, “No, we are not supposed to cross the street.” (8) They laughed at me, and then I felt embarrassed. (9) The other kids all walked across the street. (10) That is a dangerous thing to do. (11) It is really dangerous because you could get hit by a car. (12) Because is a very busy street! (13) We are supposed to wait for that our bus to come before we cross the street.

(14) When the bus came, the other kids got on first because I still had to cross the street. (15) I waited for the bus driver’s nod. (16) I felt proud when the bus driver said, “Good job. (17) You waited where you were supposed to wait.” (18) I felt proud because I did sumthing good and I did not let those kids make me change my mind. (19) One time at school I also felt proud because I won an award for attendance.

Read sentence 13. It is poorly written.

We are supposed to wait for that our bus to come before we cross the street.

Choose the best way to rewrite this sentence.

• We are supposed to wait for our bus to come before we cross the street.

• We are supposed to wait for when our bus to come before we cross the street.

• We are supposed to wait for where our bus to come before we cross the street.

• We supposed to wait for our bus to come before we cross the street.

Nate is in the third grade. His class is learning how to write stories. His teacher asked each student to remember a time when he or she did a good thing and to write a story telling about that time. Nate planned his story and wrote his rough draft. Now he needs your help editing and revising it. Here is Nate’s rough draft. Read it and then answer questions 1–10.

(1) Yesterday, on January 15 2009, I felt very good because I did the right thing. (2) I went out to the bus stop to wait for the school bus. (3) It was early in the morning. (4) It felt like the most cold day of the year. (5) I was the first one to get to the bus stop. (6) The other kids got there after a while, and they ask me if I was going to cross the street. (7) I said, “No, we are not supposed to cross the street.” (8) They laughed at me, and then I felt embarrassed. (9) The other kids all walked across the street. (10) That is a dangerous thing to do. (11) It is really dangerous because you could get hit by a car. (12) Because is a very busy street! (13) We are supposed to wait for that our bus to come before we cross the street.

(14) When the bus came, the other kids got on first because I still had to cross the street. (15) I waited for the bus driver’s nod. (16) I felt proud when the bus driver said, “Good job. (17) You waited where you were supposed to wait.” (18) I felt proud because I did sumthing good and I did not let those kids make me change my mind. (19) One time at school I also felt proud because I won an award for attendance.

Choose the correct way to write the underlined part of sentence 4.

It felt like the most cold day of the year.

• the mostest cold day

• the colder day

• the coldest day

• No change is needed.