Effective Writing

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• We have hired attorneys to help us with our divorce

• We are no longer able to reconcile. Therefore, attorney will be used to effect the dissolution of our marriage

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• Our boat capsized in the storm, so we needed rescuing

• The weather had adverse impacts on our boat resulting in the necessity to rescue us from the water

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• Our marriage ended in a divorce

• We divorced

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• Martina could not find time to walk the dogs, work, and a shopping spree

• Martina could not find time to walk the dogs, work, and shop

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• It is a shame that there are so many holidays that go uncelebrated

• It is a shame that so many holidays go uncelebrated

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• While singing in the shower, the bar of soap slipped from her hands

• The bar of soap slipped from her hands while she sang in the shower

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• When we looked back, we saw the dog following us

• Looking back, the dog was following us

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• Lying on a stretcher, they carried him out

• He was carried out on a stretcher

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• He grabbed the papers as they flew out the windows

• Flying out the window, he grabbed the papers

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• As I stepped off the bus, I saw the shopping center just ahead

• Stepping off the bus, the shopping center was just ahead