Buffalo Bill Editing Passage #1

The spectators were cheering for “Buffalo Bill” Cody the ultimate showman and the host of the renowned Wild West Show.

• Insert he was after Cody

• Insert a comma after Cody

• Change renowned to renowwned

• Get rid of the quotations

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CCSS.L.6.2A

CCSS.L.4.2C

At age 14 he noticed an ad for a pony express rider.

• Changed noticed to notices

• Change for to it was for

• Change pony express to Pony Express

• Change an to a

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CCSS.RI.9-10.3

CCSS.RI.11-12.3

CCSS.RI.9-10.5

CCSS.RI.11-12.5

CCSS.RI.8.5

An author who wrote under the pen name Ned Buntline then made the character Buffalo Bill the hero of their novels.

• Insert comma after Buntline

• Change made to making

• Change their to his

• Change wrote to write

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CCSS.RI.9-10.5

CCSS.RI.11-12.5

CCSS.RI.9-10.3

CCSS.RI.8.3

CCSS.RI.11-12.3

Part history lesson and part circus, the outdoor pageant reenacted scenes from Americas’ frontier.

• Change part to It was part

• Delete the comma

• Change pageant to pagent

• Change Americas' to America's

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CCSS.L.6.2A

CCSS.L.4.2C

When the Wild West Show disbanded just before World War 1. It was declared the most successful travelling show of all time.

• When the Wild West Show disbanded just before World War 1, it was declared the most successful travelling show of all time.

• The Wild West Show disbanded just before World War 1. Having been declared the most successful travelling show of all time.

• The Wild West Show disbanded just before World War 1, at the time it was declared the most successful travelling show of all time.

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CCSS.RI.9-10.3

CCSS.RI.11-12.3

CCSS.RI.9-10.5

CCSS.RI.11-12.5

CCSS.RI.8.3