Commas

• As I watched friends find dates for homecoming, I was initially a little discouraged. Because it looked as though my first homecoming dance would be missing a key character.

• As I watched friends find dates for homecoming, I was initially a little discouraged. It looked as though my first homecoming dance would be missing a key character.

• As I watched friends find dates for homecoming. I was initially a little discouraged because it looked as though my first homecoming dance would be missing a key character.

• Sentence 4 is written correctly.

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CCSS.L.4.1F

(8) So several of my dateless friends and me banded together and decided to go as a big group.

• Change me to I

• Insert a comma after together

• Change decided to decide

• No change should be made.

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CCSS.L.3.1A

(18) I didn’t have to stick with one specific person, I was free to mingle and dance with anyone I wanted to!

• Change one specific to no specific

• Change the comma to a semicolon

• Insert a comma after mingle

• Make no change

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CCSS.L.9-10.2A

• The 11-year-old also began writing a diary it detailed what was happening in her region of Pakistan.

• The 11-year-old also began writing a diary. With details about what was happening in her region of Pakistan.

• The 11-year-old also began writing a diary that detailed what was happening in her region of Pakistan.

• The sentences are written correctly in the paper.

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CCSS.L.6.2A

CCSS.L.7.1A

CCSS.L.9-10.1B

(21) She wanted to help right societies wrongs, especially the denial of a woman’s right to an education.

• Change societies to society's

• Delete the comma

• Change woman's to womans'

• No change should be made in sentence 21. 

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CCSS.L.1.1B

CCSS.L.2.2C

CCSS.L.3.2D

What is the most effective way to combine sentences 12 and 13?

(12) Amy Cuddy did a study on how “power poses” affect people. (13) She is a social psychologist at Harvard University.

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CCSS.L.9-10.2A

CCSS.L.3.1I

CCSS.L.4.2C

CCSS.L.5.1E

CCSS.L.7.1B

What is the most effective way to combine sentences 12 and 13?

• Amy Cuddy did a study on how “power poses” affect people she is a social psychologist at Harvard University.

• Amy Cuddy did a study on how “power poses” affect people, a social psychologist at Harvard University.

• Amy Cuddy, a social psychologist at Harvard University, did a study on how “power poses” affect people.

• Amy Cuddy did a study, at Harvard University and with a social psychologist, on how “power poses” affect people.

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CCSS.L.4.1F

• She found that the people had an increase in the hormone associated with dominance and a decrease in the hormone associated with stress who were holding their body in a position of power.

• She found that the people holding their body in a position of power had an increase in the hormone associated with dominance, the hormone associated with stress was decreased.

• She found that while the people were holding their body in a position of power, the hormones associated with dominance and stress were increased and decreased.

• She found that the people holding their body in a position of power had an increase in the hormone associated with dominance and a decrease in the hormone associated with stress.

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CCSS.L.3.1I

CCSS.L.5.1E

CCSS.L.7.1B

CCSS.L.2.1F

CCSS.L.3.1H

(2) It just comes with the territory, especially when you have an older brother, who is the epitome of “cool.”

• Change comes to come’s

• Change especially to specially

• Delete the comma after brother

• No change should be made.

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CCSS.L.3.1A

CCSS.L.2.1E

CCSS.L.3.1G

(5) I probably would have continued trying to keep up with “Big T” for the rest of my high school career, but when my family moved in the middle of my Freshman year, everything changed.

• Delete but

• Change Freshman to freshman

• Delete the comma after year

• No change needs to be made in sentence 5.

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CCSS.L.4.2C

CCSS.L.6.2A