ELAR Editing, Revision and Writing QUIZ

Which of the following should replace sentence 4 to effectively state the controlling idea of this paper?

• There are professionals known as Foley artists, and they got their name from Jack Foley, who was the first Foley artist

• Many of the sound effects that movie audiences hear are made by Foley artists, film industry professionals whose work is done after the filming of a movie is complete.

• The sounds that you and I hear when we go to see a movie were not always made when the movie was being recorded.

• Professionals create the things that are in the background in movies, including galloping horses, pelting rain, and chirping crickets.

Tags

CCSS.RI.6.2

CCSS.RI.7.2

CCSS.RL.6.2

CCSS.RL.7.2

CCSS.RL.8.2

What is the most effective way to combine sentences 6 and 7?

• Background noises and sound effects cannot be adequately recorded during filming these, including such things as roaring cars, galloping horses, or the gentle tapping of pencils on desks.

• Background noises and sound effects cannot be adequately recorded during filming when they include such things as roaring cars, galloping horses, or the gentle tapping of pencils on desks.

• Background noises and sound effects, such as roaring cars, galloping horses, or the gentle tapping of pencils on desks, cannot be adequately recorded during filming

• Background noises and sound effects cannot be adequately recorded because such things as these roaring cars, galloping horses, or the gentle tapping of pencils on desks are included during filming.

Tags

CCSS.RI.6.5

CCSS.RI.7.3

CCSS.RI.7.5

CCSS.RI.8.3

CCSS.RI.8.5

What is the most effective revision to make in sentence 15?

• Soon Foley was working to make films more realistic as he was improving the background sound with moviemakers.

• Soon Foley was working with moviemakers to make more realistic films by improving the background sounds.

• Soon Foley was working to improve the background sound with moviemakers and to make films more realistic.

• Soon Foley was working to make more realistic films by improving the moviemakers and background sounds.

Tags

CCSS.RI.6.5

CCSS.RI.7.3

CCSS.RI.7.5

CCSS.RI.8.3

CCSS.RI.8.5

What is the most effective transition to add to the beginning of sentence 19?

• Fortunately

• Finally

• As a result

• In addition

Tags

CCSS.RI.7.7

CCSS.RI.8.7

CCSS.RL.6.7

CCSS.RL.7.7

CCSS.RL.8.7

What change needs to be made in sentence 6?

• Change Although the idea to The idea

• Insert a comma after intriguing

• Change something to nothing

• No change needs to be made in sentence 6.

Tags

CCSS.L.4.2C

CCSS.L.6.2A

How should sentence 9 be changed?

• Change were to was

• Change the comma to a semicolon

• Insert a comma after people

• Change supply’s to supplies

Tags

CCSS.L.1.1B

CCSS.L.2.2C

CCSS.L.3.2D

What change, if any, should be made in sentence 11?

• Change is to was

• Change simply to simpley

• Change to far to too far

• No change should be made in this sentence.

How should sentence 14 be changed?

• Change researchers to researcher’s

• Change institute of technology to Institute of Technology

• Change disagree to disagreeing

• Sentence 14 should not be changed.

What is the correct way to write sentence 16?

• Chris Hadfield, a retired Canadian Space Agency astronaut, also says there are problems with our current technology.

• Chris Hadfield, a retired Canadian Space Agency astronaut, also saying there are problems with our current technology.

• Chris Hadfield is a retired Canadian Space Agency astronaut. Who also says there are problems with our current technology.

• Sentence 16 is written correctly in the paper.

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CCSS.L.11-12.3A

CCSS.L.7.1C

READ the following quotation. Other people may be there to help us, teach us, guide us along our path, but the lesson to be learned is always ours. —Anonymous THINK carefully about the following question. Is it better for people to learn from others, or is it better for people to learn on their own? WRITE an essay explaining the best way to learn new things. Be sure to — • clearly state your controlling idea • organize and develop your explanation effectively • choose your words carefully • use correct spelling, capitalization, punctuation, grammar, and sentences