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At age 14 he noticed an ad for a pony express rider.

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I completed the application in my neatest handwriting, carefully prepared for my interview, and gathered a stack of recomendation letters.

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I decided that I had nothing to loose, so I called the manager and scheduled an interview.

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Occasionaly, when we don't get what we want, something even better is waiting for us around the corner!

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The newly commissioned vessel was initially assigned to defend other U.S. ship's from pirate attacks.

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• Change ship's to ships

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It was time for the weekly fifth-grade volleyball game, an inevitible scene of mental anguish for me.

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In this environment it can be hard to stand out, especially if your relatively new.

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My experiences in the past will help me successfully manage everything that needs to be acomplished.

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I probably would have continued trying to keep up with "Big T" for the rest of my high school career, but when my family moved in the middle of Freshman year, everything changed.

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I had always been fascinated with chemistry, biology, and math, but since those interest hadn't fit Tyson's definition of cool, I never pursued it.

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