Writing MC: Best Revise & Multiple Skills

How can Emily best rewrite sentence 1?

• What was Harriet Tubman, was she a slave, a hero, an African-American, or a regular person?

• Was Harriet Tubman an American hero or just a regular person?

• Was Harriet Tubman leading slaves to freedom, was she really a hero?

• Harriet Tubman, what was she, was she a hero or a regular person?

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CCSS.RI.1.4

CCSS.RI.2.1

CCSS.RI.3.1

CCSS.RL.2.1

CCSS.RL.3.1

How can Emily best rewrite sentence 5?

• Countless numbers of people worked toward freedom for just an ordinary woman.

• To work toward freedom, thousands, maybe even millions of people led an ordinary woman.

• She, just an ordinary woman, gave thousands, maybe even millions of people freedom.

• Even though she was just an ordinary woman, she led countless numbers of people to work toward freedom.

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CCSS.RI.5.5

CCSS.RI.6.5

CCSS.RI.7.5

CCSS.RI.8.5

CCSS.RI.9-10.5

How can Charles best rewrite sentence 10?

• It was so long while you waited, you could buy drinks and snacks from the vendors.

• It was so long that they had vendors who sold drinks and snacks while people waited.

• They had vendors while you waited, it was so long that you could buy dishes and snacks.

• While you waited you could buy drinks and snacks, it was so long that they had vendors.

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CCSS.RI.11-12.3

CCSS.RI.6.3

CCSS.RI.7.3

CCSS.RI.8.3

CCSS.RI.9-10.3

What is the best way to revise sentence 20?

• The positive effects of a bike path and the attraction them would add to people looking to move to Lewes more than outweigh the cost.

• The positive effects of a bike path and the attraction it would add to people looking to move to Lewes more than outweigh the cost.

• The positive effects of a bike path and the attraction its would add to people looking to move to Lewes more than outweigh the cost.

• As it is

What is the best way to revise this sentence?

• Also, our team members usually get to meet like two seconds before it starts.

• In contrast, our team members usually get to the meet right before it starts.

• Our team members usually get to the meet before it starts.

• As it is

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CCSS.RI.7.2

CCSS.RI.8.2

CCSS.RL.7.2

CCSS.RL.8.2

CCSS.RL.9-10.2

How could the underlined part of the sentence be revised to improve organization and word choice?

• but it is likely that there will be many of them.

• but it is likely that there will be many times like these times.

• but it is likely that there will be more than a few of these times.

• but it is likely that there will be more than a few times like them.

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CCSS.RI.7.3

CCSS.RI.7.5

CCSS.RI.8.3

CCSS.RI.8.5

CCSS.RI.9-10.5

Which is the best way to combine sentences 15-17 to add sentence variety?

• It's only a matter of time before an accident happens because no one has been hurt yet and I'd rather not push our luck.

• Although it's only a matter of time before an accident happens, I'd rather not push our luck because no one has been hurt yet.

• No one has been hurt yet, although I'd rather not push our luck because it's only a matter of time before an accident happens.

• Although no one has been hurt yet, it's only a matter of time before an accident happens, and I'd rather not push our luck.

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CCSS.L.2.1F

CCSS.L.3.1H

CCSS.L.3.1I

CCSS.L.5.1E

CCSS.L.7.1B

Which sentence should Wanda revise because it needlessly repeats information within the sentence?

• sentence 11

• sentence 13

• sentence 14

• sentence 16

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CCSS.RI.7.3

CCSS.RI.7.5

CCSS.RI.8.3

CCSS.RI.8.5

CCSS.RI.9-10.5

How can Emily best rewrite sentence 8 so that it does NOT repeat needless information?

• Being concerned for the welfare of others and selflessness are values.

• The value of selflessness is being concerned for the welfare of others and your own needs.

• Selflessness is the value of being concerned for the welfare of others and those around you.

• Selflessness is being concerned for the welfare of others, rather than thinking of yourself.

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CCSS.RI.8.2

CCSS.RL.7.1

CCSS.RL.7.2

CCSS.RL.8.1

CCSS.RL.9-10.2

Which correction should be made to this sentence?

• Change His to Her

• Insert a comma after sister

• Delete the comma after Betty Anne

• Change was to were

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CCSS.L.4.2C

CCSS.L.6.2A