Revise & Editing Fly Time

(1) Once upon a time, there was a little red hen. (2) She found some wheat seeds and asked her animal friends if they wanted to help her plant them. (3) The pig, the cat, and the duck all said no. (4) So, the little red hen did all the work herself. (5) She planted the seeds, watered them, and harvested the wheat. (6) When the bread was baked, the little red hen asked her friends if they wanted to share it. (7) But they all said no again.

What is the BEST way to revise sentence 5 to make it more DESCRIPTIVE?

• She planted the seeds, watered them, and harvested the wheat.

• She carefully planted the seeds, watered them every day, and patiently waited for the wheat to grow before harvesting it.

• She planted the seeds, watered them, and harvested the wheat quickly.

(1) Once upon a time, there was a little red hen. (2) She found some wheat seeds and asked her animal friends if they wanted to help her plant them. (3) The pig, the cat, and the duck all said no. (4) So, the little red hen did all the work herself. (5) She planted the seeds, watered them, and harvested the wheat. (6) When the bread was baked, the little red hen asked her friends if they wanted to share it. (7) But they all said no again.

How can sentence 7 be revised to make it more interesting?

• But they all said no again.

• The pig, the cat, and the duck refused to share the bread.

• Her friends didn't want to share the bread, even though it smelled delicious!

(1) Once upon a time, there was a little red hen. (2) She found some wheat seeds and asked her animal friends if they wanted to help her plant them. (3) The pig, the cat, and the duck all said no. (4) So, the little red hen did all the work herself. (5) She planted the seeds, watered them, and harvested the wheat. (6) When the bread was baked, the little red hen asked her friends if they wanted to share it. (7) But they all said no again.

How can the following two sentences be combined? "The little red hen did all the work herself. She planted the seeds, watered them, and harvested the wheat."

• The little red hen did all the work herself, planting the seeds, watering them every day, and harvesting the wheat.

• The little red hen did all the work herself, but she was happy to do it.

• The little red hen did all the work herself, including planting the seeds, watering them, and harvesting the wheat.

(1) The teachers said that the test would be difficult, but they didn't give us any specific information about what to expect. (2) Luckily, they thought the test was easy!

Look at sentence 2. The word "they" does not clearly explain who thought the test was easy. Which word or words BEST replace "they" to improve the sentence?

• students

• principals

• parents

Which of the following is a proper noun?

• city

• teacher

• river

• New York

Which of the following is a verb?

• computer

• running

• book

• table