Revise & Edit - "Take a Walk" & "Escape Artist"

What change is needed in sentence 2?

• Change enjoy to enjoys

• Change in to at

• Change there to their

• Change neighborhood to Neighborhood

What is the correct way to write sentences 5 and 6?

• It shouldn’t be hard for most people to find a convenient place to walk.

• It shouldn’t be hard. For most people to find a convenient place to walk.

• It shouldn’t be hard for most people, they can find a convenient place to walk.

• It shouldn’t be hard for most people to find it. A convenient place to walk.

Fill in the blank below to correct sentence 7.

Another benefit of walking _____ that it provides an opportunity for conversation

What change needs to be made to sentence 8?

• Change while to where

• Change and to they

• Change days to day’s

• Change events to evints

 Which sentence would BEST follow and support sentence 4?

• Everyone was asleep for the night, so it was noticeably quiet throughout the house.

• There was a small opening where the edge of the tunneling tube on the side of my cage had not been fully attacked.

• Several toys and books had been left on the floor in the room where my cage is kept.

• It had been raining outside all evening, and it was so loud that I could hear the heavy drops hitting the rooftop shingles.

Andrew has included a sentence that does not belong in the fourth paragraph (sentences 12–17). Which sentence should be removed from this paragraph?

• Sentence 14

• Sentence 15

• Sentence 16

• Sentence 17

Select the MOST effective transition for the beginning of sentence 22.

• Suddenly

• However

• Although

• Furthermore

Andrew wants to add this sentence to his story.

Boris the dog was up now too, and he’s made it clear who the boss is around here.

Where is the BEST place to add this sentence?

• After sentence 2

• After sentence 6

• After sentence 17

• After sentence 28

What is the BEST way to combine sentences 31 and 32?

• Because I was glad to see when bedtime finally came, the girls left my cage right on the floor where it would be easy for me to climb back in.

• When bedtime finally came, I was glad to see that the girls left my cage right on the floor where it would be easy for me to climb back in.

• Bedtime finally came, while I was glad to see it and the girls left my cage right on the floor where it would be easy for me to climb back in.

• I was glad to see that the girls left my cage right on the floor where it would be easy for me to climb back in, but bedtime finally came.

Andrew wants to improve the closing of his story. Which sentence can BEST replace sentence 35 and help to accomplish this goal?

• I now understood that there was no place like home.

• Hamsters need to eat during the day and sleep at night.

• The house had proven to be really dark at night.

• The girls will probably take better care of my cage.